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  COMPARING THE ABILITY OF 2 nd AND 4 th SEMESTER STUDENTS IN GIVING FEEDBACK TO THEIR FRIENDS’ WRITING A SARJANA PENDIDIKAN THESIS Presented as Partial Fulfillment of the Requirements to Obtain the Sarjana Pendidikan Degree in English Language Education By

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COMPARING THE ABILITY OF 2 AND 4 SEMESTER STUDENTS

  

IN GIVING FEEDBACK

TO THEIR FRIENDS’ WRITING

A SARJANA PENDIDIKAN THESIS

Presented as Partial Fulfillment of the Requirements

to Obtain the Sarjana Pendidikan Degree

in English Language Education

  

By

Ardhita Meilina

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ABSTRACT

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  Meilina, Ardhita. 2012. Meilina, Ardhita. 2012. Comparing 2 and 4 Semester Students’ Ability in Giving Feedback to Their Friends’ Writing.

  Peer feedback has an essential role in improving students’ writing skill.

Through peer feedback activity, the students will have opportunities to work

collaboratively with their peers and improve their writing abilities individually.

  

This role encourages them to be critical readers and critical thinkers at once.

However, the students’ ability in giving feedback to their peers’ writing is

different. nd

  This study aimed at investigating to what extent 2 semester students and th

  

4 semester students give feedback to their friend’s writing. The research was

conducted using document analysis. The participants of the study were the second

semester students who were taking Paragraph Writing II in the Academic Year of

2011/2012 and the fourth semester students who were taking Critical Reading and

Writing in the Academic Year of 2010/2011 at the English Education Study

Program of Sanata Dharma University. The instrument was adapted from Hughey

et al. (1983). with some modification from the writer so that it would be relevance

to this research.

  From this study, it was found that the second semester students and the

fourth semester students had different ability in giving feedback to their peers’

writing. The fourth semester students were more detailed in giving comment; they

focused not only on the language accuracy and the mechanic of the writings but

also on the content and organization of the writing. They did not only concern on

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ABSTRAK

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Meilina, Ardhita. 2012. Comparing 2 and 4 Semester Students’ Ability in

Giving Feedback to Their Friends’ Writing.

  Dalam meningkatkan kemampuan menulis siswa, saling memberikan

umpan balik antar siswa memiliki peranan yang penting. Melalui aktivitas ini,para

siswa memiliki kesempatan untuk bekerjasama dengan temannya dan

meningkatkan kemampuan menulis mereka secara individual. Akan tetapi

kemampuan masing-masing siswa dalam memberikan umpan balik terhadap

karangan teman-temannya berbeda-beda.

  Studi ini meneliti seberapa jauh kemampuan siswa semester dua dan siswa

semester empat dalam memberikan umpan balik terhadap karangan temannya.

Studi ini menggunakan metode dokumen analisis. Peserta studi ini adalah siswa

semester dua di kelas Paragraph Writing II pada tahun angkatan 20011/2012 serta

siswa semerter empat di kelas Critical Reading and Writing pada tahun angkatan

2010/2011 di Program Studi Pendidikan Bahasa Inggris, Kampus Sanata Dharma.

Instrument penelitian yang digunakan di adapatasi dari Hughey et al.(1983).

dengan sedikit perubahan dari penulis agar tetap sesuai dengan studi ini.

  Dari hasil studi ini, ditemukan bahwa para siswa semester dua memiliki

kemampuan memberikan umpan balik yang berbeda dengan para siswa di

semester empat. Para siswa semester empat lebih rinci dalam memberikan

komentar, mereka tidak hanya fokus pada tata bahasa maupun tanda baca namun

juga memperhatikan isi serta organisasi dalam karangan temannya. Mereka tidak

hanya fokus pada kesalahan yang tampak di permukaan tapi juga focus pada isi

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ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS

I dedicate my greatest and deepest gratitude Allah Subhanahu Wata’ala for

his blessing, love, and strength so I could finish the thesis and reach one of my

dreams.

  My sincere appreciation also goes to my major sponsor C. Tutyandari,

S.Pd.,M.Pd. for her time, patience, and support to the completion of the thesis. I

also would like to sincerely thank Christina Kristiyani, S.Pd.,M.Pd., for sharing

me her time, critical thoughts and helpful suggestions.

  My deepest gratitude goes to my beloved parents, Bapak Saifudin and Ibu

Sri Haryani for their endless love, prayer, and encouragement all my life. My

deepest thanks also go to my dearest little sister, Aulia Luthfiana for all of the

supports which she gives to me especially in conducting this thesis.

  My best thanks are also delivered to all of my friends. I thank Niar and

Ratna, thanks the friendship. I deeply grateful for my friends, Azizah, Dina, who

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TABLE OF CONTENTS

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TITLE PAGE................................................................................................. i

APPROVAL PAGES………………………………………………………. ii

STATEMENTS OF WORK’S ORIGINALITY…………………………. iv

PERNYATAAN PERSETUJUAN PUBLIKASI ……………………………… v

DEDICATION PAGES ……………………………………………………. vi

ABSTRACT ……………………………………………………………….. vii

ABSTRAK ………………………………………………………………….. viii

ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS ………………………………………………. ix

TABLE OF CONTENTS …………………………………………………. x

LIST OF TABLES…………………………………………………………. xiii

LIST OF FIGURES………………………………………………………... xiv

LIST OF APPENDICES …………………………………………………... xv

CHAPTER I: INTRODUCTION …………………………………………. 1

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1. Theories of Writing……………………………………….. 7

  a. Concept of Writing………………………………….. 7

  b. Writing Product Versus Writing Approach…………. 10

  c. Writing as both a Product and Approach …………… 13

2. Theories of Feedback……………………………………… 13

  a. Definition of Feedback……………………………… 13

  b. Purpose of Feedback ………………………………… 14

  c. Focus on Feedback ………………………………….. 15

  d. Source of Feedback ………………………………… 16

3. Theories of Peer Feedback……………………………….. 18

a. Benefits of Peer Feedback ………………………… 18

B. Theoretical Framework…………………………………………. 19

  CHAPTER III: METHODOLOGY …………………………………….. 21 A. Research Method……………....................................................... 21

B. Research Setting ………………………………………………... 22

C. Research Participants …………………………………………… 22

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  b. Organization ……………………………………… 41

  c. Language Accuracy………………………………… 48

  d. Mechanic …………………………………………… 54

  2. Data Presentations and Discussions on the Results of 2nd Semesters Students’ Feedback to Their Peers’ Writing ……… 56 a. Content…………………………………………….. 56

  b. Organization……………………………………….. 61

  c. Language Accuracy ……………………………….. 63

  d. Mechanic…………………………………………… 66

  3. The Comparison between 2nd and 4th Semester Students Ability in Giving Feedback to Their Peers’ Writing……… 69

CHAPTER V: CONCLUSIONS AND RECOMMENDATIONS …….. 71 A. Conclusions …………………………………………………….. 71 B. Recommendations ……………………………………………… 72 REFERENCES …………………………………………………………. 74

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  LIST OF TABLES

Table 4.1. Spelling ………………………………………………………… 55 Table 4 2. Tenses ………………………………………………………….. 66Table 4.3 . Spelling ……………………………………………………….. 67

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LIST OF FIGURES

Figure 4. 1. The Clarity of Writing Purpose ………………………………. 28

Figure 4.2. The Clarity of Thesis Statement ……………………………… 31Figure 4.3. Unclear Thesis Statement ……………………………………… 32Figure 4.4. Topic ……………………………………………………………. 35Figure 4.5. The Clarity of Discussion/Arguments…………………………. 37 Figure 4. 6. The Relevance Information to the Topic …………………….. 39Figure 4.7. The Information was Related to the Topic …………………… 39 Figure 4. 8. Tenses ………………………………………………………….. 48Figure 4.9. Incorrect Tenses ……………………………………………….. 49Figure 4.10. Passive Voice …………………………………………………. 52 Figure 4. 11. Punctuation Marks ………………………………………….. 54Figure 4.12. The Ways in Giving Feedback ……………………………… 57

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LIST OF APPENDICES

Appendix Page

  

Appendix A ………………………………………………………………. 77

Letters of Permission……………………………………………… 78

Appendix B……………………………………………………………….. 83

nd The Results Checklist of 2 Semester Students in Giving Feedback to

  Their Peers ‘Writing………………………………………………. 84

Appendix C ……………………………………………………………… 110

th The Results Checklist of 4 Semester Students in Giving Feedback to

  Their Peers’ Writing……………………………………………… 111

Appendix D……………………………………………………………… 198

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Examples of Feedbacks Given by 2 Semester Students …………….. 199

Appendix E……………………………………………………………….. 205

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Examples of Feedbacks Given by 4 Semester Students……………… 206

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CHAPTER 1 INTRODUCTION This chapter provides background of study, problem formulation, problem

  

limitation, benefits of the study, and definition of terms that are going to be

discussed.

A. Research Background Writing becomes one of the English skills that have to be mastered.

  

Through writing, we can express our thoughts, ideas, and also feeling. According

to Walvoord (1985), “Writing is a useful tool for discovering and thinking. It is

also the vital connection on which education, culture, and commerce in our

society depend (p.1).”

  Considering that writing is very important not only in an educational

sector but also in a real world when we work later, from now a student should be

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the English skills which require students to experience trials and error process in

obtaining a qualified writing product.

  Lewis (2002) explains that, feedback is a way for teachers to describe their

learners’ language. It gives teachers information about individual and collective

class progress. It also can be an evaluation on their own teaching feedback is fun

and useful activity that becomes one of the many ways students can learn to

improve their writing (p.3). nd

  Based on researcher’s experiences, when the researcher was in the 2

semester, she could not give feedback to their friends’ writing well. The

researcher only paid attention to the grammar mistakes on their friends’ writing

and less pay attention to the writings’ content. Unfortunately, the researcher was

also not sure whether the feedback which she gave on their friends’ grammar

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mistakes was correct or not. However, when the researcher was in the 4

semester, her ability in giving feedback on her friends’ writing was better. The

researcher did not only pay attention to the surface errors but also on the content

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  3 In particular, feedback from low-ability students is considered most problematic: instructors question whether low-ability students have something to offer high-ability students, and whether low-ability students helping other low-ability students would be too much like the blind leading the blind. In terms of skills, instructors worry whether low-ability students are capable of detecting problems in the text, whether they understand which problems have the largest negative impact, and whether they are able to accurately describe the problem and offer useful solutions that would fix the major problems. Another recent study examined how high-ability sources and low-ability

sources differed in their commenting style (Patchan, Charney, & Schunn, 2009),

interestingly, when provided with specific feedback rubrics, there were very few

differences between the two types of sources. For example, both high-ability and

low-ability peers produced an equal number of high-level writing comments. The

one critical feature that differed was localization: high-ability sources provided

more localized comments than low-ability sources Considering the researcher’s experience and the experts’ explanations nd

above, the researcher is determined to compare the ability of 2 semester students

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and 4 semester students can give feedback to their friend’s writing. The

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  4 C. Problem Limitation

  Since peer feedback has an essential role in improving students' skills in

writing process. Thus, the researcher intends to focus on a document analysis

about peer feedback which was conducted by 2 nd and 4 th semester students at

English Education Study Program, Sanata Dharma University Yogyakarta. The

researcher takes the respondents from the PBI students of Academic Year

2011/2012 and 2010/2011 who are taking Paragraph writing and critical reading

and writing II.

  D. Research Objective The objective of the research is stated as to find out to what extent 2 nd semester students and 4 th semester students can give feedback to their friend’s writing.

  E. Research Benefits This study is expected to give contribution to

1. The English teacher

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2. Students of English Study Program

  Through peer feedback activity, it is expected to increase students’ ability in giving feedback to their friends’ writing. Besides that, students are expected to have opportunities to work collaboratively with peers and to improve their writing abilities individually. This role encourages them to be critical readers and critical thinkers at once.

F. Definition of Terms

  The researcher provides some definitions of the terms used in this study. They are stated as follows:

1.Document Analysis

  Content or Document Analysis according to Aryet al (2002) is “A study which focuses on analyzing and interpreting recorded materials within their contexts, such as public records, textbooks, letters, films, diaries, and so on (p.27).” Krippendorff (2004) also argues that, “ As a research technique, content analysis provides new insights, increases a

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  2. Feedback Johnson and Johnson (1994) define feedback as “Information that allows individuals to compare their actual performance with the standard of performance (p.277).” According to Keh (1990), “Feedback is fundamental element of process approach trough writing. It can be define is input from a reader to the writer for revision (p.294).” From those definitions, the researcher concludes that peer feedback refers to the process of constructing approach to give information as a revision for students’ writing which is conducted by students to another student.

  3. Writing Harmer (1991) argues that writing is “A productive skill which requires students to produce a written form of language (p.16).” It means that that students have to produce their ideas, expression, or thought in a written form.

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CHAPTER II REVIEW OF RELATED LITERATURE Chapter two is aimed at discussing the theories underlying this study. This

  

chapter covers theoretical description and theoretical review. The theoretical

description focuses on the theories that underline the topic of the research. Since

the objective of this study is to find out to what extent the second and fourth

semester students give feedback to their friends’ writing, the theories that will be

presented cover the issue of the theory of writing, and the presence of feedback in

writing and peer feedback. The implementation of the theories in this study is

discussed in the theoretical framework.

A. Theoretical Description

  This part consists of an explanation about three theories which underline

this study. The first theory is about theory of writing, the second theory is the

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ways of thinking, learning, and sharing ideas with others. Writing also plays

often integral role in an individual’s personal as well as professional life

(Zimmerman and Rodrigues, 1992: 4).

  In English learning, there are four skills which have to be learned. They

are reading, writing, speaking, and listening. For English as Foreign Language

learners including the students of English Education Study Program, writing

becomes one of the English skills that have to be mastered. Through writing, we

can express our thoughts, ideas, and also feeling. Considering that writing is

very important not only in an educational sector but also in a real world when

we work later, from now a student should produce a good piece of writing.

  A good piece of writing should present the content, organization, sentence

structure, and word choice well so it can be appropriate for the writer’s,

audience, and propose (Zimmerman and Rodrigues, 1992; p.9). Besides

producing a good piece of writing; the students also have to improve their

writing skill because it is crucial for them as students and as a professional later

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  9 M: MAIN IDEA : Effective public writing focuses on a main idea appropriate to its audience and purpose.

O: ORGANIZATION : Effective public writing has a well organized pattern of

sub points with the evidence.

S: SUPPORT : Effective public writing supports its points with the

evidence, illustration, and detail needed to accomplish its purpose for its audience.

S: SENTENCE AND : Effective public writing has sentences and paragraphs

PARAGRAPHS that are clear and readable and that serve the writer’s

purpose for the audience.

  

C: CONVENTION : Effective public writing follows the conventions of

grammar, punctuation, and documentation that its audience expects.

  From those characteristics, we can conclude that to have a good piece of

writing is important because it means that through a good writing, we can really

share our thoughts and ideas so that the readers will understand clearly and

easily.

  There are three processes of writing that have to be followed by the writers

so that they can produce a good piece of writing. Those three processes

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  10 data. Finally, the writers must consider the audiences or the readers of their writing. By prewriting, it means that the writers plan their correspondence.

  2) Writing After conducting prewriting, the writers should make a draft of their writing. The writer should organize their draft according to some logical sequence. Then, the writers must format the content so that the readers can understand it clearly and easily.

  3) Rewriting The final process of writing is rewriting the drafts. Rewriting allows the writers to perfect their writing. Revision is the most important stage in the writing process. Rewriting is the stage in which the writers make sure that everything is just right.

  The process approach to writing including prewriting, writing and

rewriting can help the writers to write successfully and effectively in any

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(1992) explains that “Product approach means that the focus is on the ability to

produce correct texts or “products” (p.106).”

  Furthermore, Nunan (1992) argues that “Product oriented approach focus

on task in which the learners imitate copy and transform models provided by the

teacher or the textbook (p.272).” According to Brown (2007), the compositions

of product-oriented approach are supposed to meet certain standards of

prescribed English rhetorical style, reflect accurate grammar and be organized in

conformity with what the audience would consider to be conventional (p.391).

  In evaluating, usually the teacher will give a list of criteria that included

content, organization, vocabulary use, grammatical use, and mechanical

consideration such as spelling and punctuation (Brown, 2007; p. 391).Based on

those explanations, we can conclude that writing product approach emphasis on

the quality of the writing without noticing the steps and efforts taken by the

students in producing their writings. Thus, the major focus of this approach is on

the finished product writing and the grade of writing.

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  12 In writing process approach, students will be more aware of the

importance process of writing. Students have the opportunity to develop their

ability in writing skill it through a set of steps. This process more emphasis on

the steps and efforts taken by the students in producing their writings rather than

just focus on the final result. The students are encouraged to put their ideas onto

paper without worrying too much about correctness in the initial steps. They

then share their work with others, getting feedback on their ideas, and how they

are expressed, before revising (p.272). Thus, it can be said that students can

practice to produce a goof piece of writing through a cooperation process

between teachers and students or students with students to develop the ability of

writing skill in the form of feedback process.

  By following the steps of the writing process previously, the writing

process will give great advantages to the students in developing their writing

skill. The first benefit is that by having the writing process, the students will

have more opportunity for meaningful writing and become independent learners

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c. Writing as both a Product and Process

  Instead of saying that the process approach is better than the product

approach or vice versa, it is best to say that writing is a form of both process and

product. As stated by Brown (2001) that every process of writing activity should

lead to the final product (p. 335. Furthermore, Brown (2001) explains that:

  The current emphasis on process writing must of course be seen as a perspective of a balance between process and product. As in most language teaching approaches, it is quite possible for you to go to an extreme in emphasizing process to the extent that the final products diminish in importance …. This product is, after all, the ultimate goal; it is the reason that we go through the process of pre writing, drafting, revising, and editing…. Process is not the end; it is the means to the end (p.337). This idea implies that the process of writing is as important as the product

of writing. Thus, the process in producing a piece of writing and the final

product of that writing of cannot be separated. In other word, the students must

first experience the process of writing (of pre writing, drafting, revising, and

editing) in order to produce a good piece of writing.

2. Theories of Feedback

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(p.2). From those two definitions, we can conclude that feedback is an important

part of teaching and learning activity so that the learners can improve their

performance on what they have learned.

b. Purpose of Feedback

  Lewis (2002; p. 3-4) provides several purposes of feedback for both

teachers and students. First, feedback provides information for teachers and

students. Teachers can collect about individual and collective progress that can

be one of the forms of evaluations on their own teaching. For students, feedback

is an ongoing form of assessment which is more focused than mark or grades.

  The second is to give students advice in learning. Through feedback, the

teachers can give some comment about students’ learning processes that the

students can understand their strength which can be developed and their

weaknesses that have to be evaluated.

  The third purpose is to provide students with language input. Both

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  15 Feedback can also be a motivation for the students. Feedback can

encourage the students to study and use language to the best of their ability by

taking into account whatever the teacher knows about the learners’ attitude.

  The last purpose of feedback is to lead students toward autonomy.

Feedback can lead students to the point where they can find their own mistakes.

By knowing their strengths and weaknesses, the students are encouraged to be

autonomous students.

  In the process of writing, students often do not realize their mistakes;

therefore as also stated by Lewis (2002) feedback is needed to revise those

writings which are ultimately expected to improve the quality of their writings.

Williams (2003) also states that, “The goal of feedback is to teach skills that

help students improve their writing proficiency to the point where they are

cognizant of what is expected of them as writers and are able to produce it with

minimal errors and maximum clarity.”

c. Focus on Feedback

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(William, 2003). Based on Park (2006), form feedback is one of the most

commonly used methods. It focuses on students’ grammatical knowledge.

  According to William (2003), content feedback focus on comments on

organization, ideas, and amount of detail. In feedback on content, the corrector

points out problems and offers suggestions to improve the future revision. Using

this feedback, the students are expected to incorporate information from the

comment into the version of their writing.

d. Source of Feedback

  Lewis (2002; p. 15-23) explains that there are three sources of feedback, namely teacher feedback, peer feedback, and self correction.

1) Teacher Feedback

  In many sources, teachers are the main sources of feedback on both oral and written language. One of the ways of teacher feedback is traditional marking. In traditional marking, it means that teachers make marks on the students’ writing. The marks can be in form of words as

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  17 conference between writer and teacher is the chance to discuss the students’ work in a combination of commenting and questioning. One of problem of this technique is the time management. In a large class individual time can be difficult to organize.

  Another variation of teacher feedback is through collective feedback. In this collective feedback, the teacher looks at everyone’s work, noting the points that need feedback, but to present the comment collectively, either orally, or on the paper or on the board. The teacher notes silently the points as they are made by individuals but comment on the comment on them to the whole class. Through this kind of feedback, the students will not be ashamed with their friends because the teacher does not directly point the students who make the errors.

  Therefore, the students need to be active in looking at their own work to find the reason for their mark.

2) Peer Feedback

  The students usually will get bore if they just get feedback only

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3) Self Correction

  Self correction means that the students can correct and evaluate their own work. It can increase the students’ independence from the teacher as the students have to find their own mistakes in their writing by themselves. By finding their own mistakes independently, the students are expected to remember better that hopefully the will not do the same mistakes again.

3. Peer Feedback

a. Benefits of Peer Feedback

  Peer Feedback is believed to provide some advantages. Hyland (2003)

argues that peer feedback both improve writers’ drafts and develop readers’

understanding of good writing. Moreover, peer feedback not only can improve

students’ critical reading skill but also gain the skills necessary to critically

analyze and revise their own writing (Zhang, 1995, as cited in Hyland, 2003:

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writing gives opportunity to the students to act as resources to each other, thus

assuming more active role in their learning (p.3). This statement is supported by

Mittan (1989) as cited in Hyland (2003), peer feedback can create authentic

social context for interaction and learning (p.3). In other word, peer feedback

will create a cooperative learning in which the will be forced to be active in

teaching learning activities.

B. Theoretical Framework

  Considering that writing is very important not only in an educational sector

but also in a real world when we work later, from now a student should produce a

good piece of writing. There are three processes on producing a good writing

which are prewriting, writing, and revising. In this study, the researcher concerns

with the prewriting process. On the prewriting process, the students determine the

objectives of their writing and generate the ideas. On prewriting process, the

students write the writing’s draft which can be revised to improve the writing’s

result. Writing’s feedback is one of some ways that can help the students to revise

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expected to help the students to improve their writing’s skill and keep the writing

class interesting.

  The students have different ability in giving feedback to their friends’ writing.

Some of them just focus on the surface error of the writing and other focus on the

information that they can get from the writing.Theory of feedback proposed by

Fathman and Whalley (1990), William (2003) and Park (2006) can help to

identify the feedback focus given by the students. Based on Park (2006), there are

two categories of writing feedback focus, they are form and content. Feedback on

forms concern on grammar and mechanic errors while feedback on content

concerns on organization, ideas, and amount of detail.

  Conducting the study, the researcher adapts document analysis. To obtain the

detailed data, a feedback categorization checklist was used as the main instrument

in this study. There is a procedure for gathering the data of this study. The

researcher distributed the writing feedback checklist to the second semester

students of Paragraph Writing and fourth semester students Critical Reading and

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accomplish this study. Thus, in this chapter the researcher explains every part of

the methodology including what research method was used, research participants,

where the research took place, research instrument, how the data were gathered

during the research, and data analysis as well as research procedure.

A. Research Method

  This study belonged to a qualitative research. According to Ary et al

(2002) qualitative study is, “A study which aims to understand a phenomenon by

focusing on the total picture (p.25)”. Ary (2002) et al also state that “The goal of

qualitative study is to get a holistic picture and depth understanding of a social

phenomena, rather than a numeric analysis of data” (p.25). They (2002) also add

that a qualitative study inquirer deals with data that are in the form of words,

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diaries, and so on” (p.27). Krippendorff (2004) also argues that, “As a research

technique, content analysis provides new insights, increases a researcher’s

understanding of a particular phenomena, or informs practical actions” (p.18). In

this study, the researcher analyzed the feedback checklist that had been fulfilled

by the students to get new insights and better understanding about to what extent

the students can give feedback to their friends’ writings.

  B. Research Setting This research is conducted at the English Education Study Program of Sanata Dharma University which is located at Mrican, Yogyakarta.

  C. Research Participants The participants of this research were the second semester students who

were taking Paragraph Writing in the Academic Year of 2011/2012 and the fourth

semester students who were taking critical reading and writing II in the Academic

Year of 2010/2011 at the English Education Study Program of Sanata Dharma

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  23 2012 There were 75 participants from second semester students who filled

out the instruments which had been distributed. The participants consisted of the

students of Class A, Class C, and Class D. The researcher analyzed 35 which

were chosen randomly from all of the participants.

D. Research instruments and Data Gathering Technique

  To collect the data, the researcher used the feedback checklist as the

research instrument. The researcher analyzed the feedback checklist that had been

filled by the students to get the data for this study. The researcher wanted to know

to what extent the second semester students and forth semester students can give

feedback to their friends’ writings. Besides that, the researcher analyzed how the

students gave feedback for every aspect of their friends’ writings. The researcher

also wanted to compare to what extent the second semester students and the fourth

semester students can give feedback to their friends’ writing that she could see

which one performed better.

1. Feedback Checklist

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and mechanic. The researcher gave some modifications in the feedback checklist

in order to be relevance to this research.

  The researcher asked the students to work in pair in order to give feedback

to their friend’s writing. After that, the researcher distributed feedback checklists

that had to be filled by the students based on their friend’s first writing. The

feedback checklist consisted of four categories, they were content, organization,

language use or language accuracy, and mechanic. In each category, there were

some points that had to be considered by the participants as the guideline in giving

feedback to their friends’ writing.

  After a week, the researcher collected the feedback checklist that had been

filled to be analyzed. The researcher compared the second and fourth semester

students’ ability in giving feedback based on the feedback checklist that had been

fulfilled. The research would like to find out to what extent 2nd semester students

and 4th semester students give feedback to their friend’s writing.

E. Data Analysis Technique

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  25 Through this grouping, it was expected to help the researcher to analyze how the

students gave feedback to their friends’ writing on each aspect on the feedback

checklist. What aspects of the feedback checklist that could be the strengths of the

second and fourth semester students in giving feedback and what aspects of the

feedback checklist that could be the weaknesses of the second and fourth semester

students in giving feedback.

  Afterward, the researcher compared the ability between second semester

students and the fourth students in giving feedback to their friend’s writing.

  Finally, some conclusions were drawn.

F. Research Procedure

  

Conducting this study, the writer did several steps. The steps were:

  1. Identifying the problems

  2. Identifying research participants

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CHAPTER IV RESEARCH RESULTS AND DISCUSSIONS This chapter presents the results which answer the question previously

  

formulated in research formulation. The researcher analyzed the data and gave

reasons to reach conclusion.

  The sources of data in this research were the second semester students who

were taking Paragraph Writing in the Academic Year of 2011/2012 and the fourth

semester students who were taking Critical Reading and Writing II in the

Academic Year of 2010/2011 at the English Education Study Program of Sanata

Dharma University. To collect the data from participants, the researcher employed

an instrument which was writing feedback checklist. This data were collected in

May 2012 until June 2012.

  The researcher obtained the data through asking the students to fill in the

writing feedback checklist which had been distributed. The students were asked to

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A. Data Presentations and Discussions on the Results of 4 Semester

Students’ Feedback to Their Peers’ Writing The Researcher obtained the data from the first draft of the forth semester

students who were taking Critical Reading Writing II with their friends’ feedback

on it, based on the writing feedback checklist which had been provided by the

researcher. The researcher distributed the instrument to class A and D of Critical

Reading and Writing Class. There are forty copies which were distributed to Class

A and forty three copies distributed to Class D. The total checklists which were

returned to the researcher were sixty nine. Some of the checklists had not been

completed. Therefore, the researcher took the data randomly from Class A and D.

  

There were thirty nine data results from Class A and D which had been analyzed

by the researcher. There were four categories in feedback checklist and in each

category there were some points which had to be considered by the proofreaders.

1. Content

  Providing feedback on the content of the students’ writing is very

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were some points ts provided by the researcher as the guide ideline when the

participants gave fee feedback on the content of their friends’ writing tings.

a. The Clarit rity of the Writing’s Purpose

  In this part, th the researcher wanted to know the participants nts’ understanding

related to the purp rpose of the writing that they read. The resea earcher wanted to

figure out how the the participants provided arguments about th the clarity of the

purpose of their frie friends’ writing.

  Clear =95% 95% Unclear = 1 r = 15 %

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  29 purpose of their friends’ writings but they did not give argument why they stated that the writings’ purpose was clear. Second, the proofreaders could state the purpose of their friends’ writing and gave the arguments why they said that the purpose was clear. The last was the proofreader stated that the writing had a clear purpose but they did not restate what the writing’s purpose was.

  Example 1: Teen pregnancy is one of risk of having sex which can give great harm on teenagers’ future. If a girl has pregnant, she would loss her future. They can reach their dreams because they do not continue go to school or college. They will be teen family which has lack of knowledge. In this essay, I will explain some reasons why we should prevent teen pregnancy. (Sample no.12) The proofreader stated that the writing’s purpose was clear which was the writer would like to persuade the readers to prevent teen pregnancy. The proofreader also stated that writer had put the thesis statement clearly in the beginning of the article so it made the reader could understand the writing’s purpose well. The proofreader also said that the writer put clear explanations

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  30 In the feedback checklist, the proofreader stated that the writing purpose

was clear in which the writer wanted to persuade the teenagers not to listen Hip

  

Hop because it gave some bad effects. However, the proofreader did not give

the reasons why she stated that the purpose of the writing was clear.

  Example 3 Society has created people nowadays to value the beauty in appearance than inner beauty. Because of it, people tent to look for an instant way to get the attractive appearance like undergoing the cosmetic surgery. But actually, they don’t really know what the cosmetic surgery might bring aftermath. There are some reasons why people should not take the cosmetic surgery, like spend lot of money, bring physical risk, give the patient psychological impact and there is no guarantee that surgery will work well. (Sample no.32) The proofreader said that the purpose of this writing was clear. She stated

that the purpose of the writing was the author wanted the readers to realize the

danger of the cosmetic surgery. Further, the proofreader explained that the

purpose of the writing could be understood clearly from the explanation in the

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which was read by by her was less persuasive so she did not re really understand

what actually the p e purpose of that writing was.

b. The Clar larity of the Thesis Statement

  In this part, t t, the researcher would like to analyze how w the participant

analyzed the thesi esis statement of their friends’ writings. It It could give an

explanation related ted to the participants’ understanding about wh what actually their

friends wanted to te o tell in their writings.

  Clear :82 % 82 % Unvlear :1 ar :18%

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  32 Giving ving Reasons:57% Did no d not give any reason :43%

Figure 4.3 Unclear Thesis Statements

  

Four proofread eaders from seven proofreaders who stated tha that essays which

they read had unc nclear gave reasons why they thought that th the essay had an unclear thesis state tatement while three proofreaders said that the the writer had not stated the thesis sta statement yet.

  Consider the followin ing examples

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  33 In this writing, the proofreader stated that the thesis statement of this writing was in the last part of the paragraph. Besides that, the proofreader also gave further explanations that the writer made clear and good thesis statement. Example 2 Society has created people nowadays to value the beauty in appearance than the inner beauty. Because of it, people tend to look for an instant way to get the attractive appearance like undergoing the cosmetic surgery. But actually, they don’t really know what cosmetic surgery might bring aftermath. There are

  Thesis some reasons why people should not take cosmetic surgery, like spend a lot of money, bring physical risks, give the patient psychological impact and there is

  Statement no guarantee that surgery will work well.(Sample no.32) The proofreader of this essay stated that the thesis statement of this essay was the last sentence of the first paragraph. Furthermore, she gave some suggestions to the writer to make the thesis statement briefer so it would be clearer. The proofreader’s suggestion was very useful to improve the writing Example 3

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  34 which are beautiful enough, some food courts which sell delicious food from another cities, strategic location, and the air is still fresh.” In this case, the researcher concluded that actually the proofreader hesitated in deciding thesis statement of the writing because the proofreader also stated that the writing had an unclear thesis statement. Example 4 Once I heard a proverb saying, “Health was quiet expensive to cure so we must be healthy over time.” What do you think about this? Have you ever noticed this? Well, if we think deeper, we will say that that proverb is true since nowadays, there are lots of diseases such as cholesterol, obese, and even many more. These infect not only those belonging to aging people, but also the young ones. How could it be? It is simply answered, “…because they do not like move their body very often. There are several reasons below why you should do sport instead of being lazy. (Sample no.7)

  In the fourth example, the proofreader said that the writing had an unclear thesis statement. The proofreader considered that the writer did not mention the thesis statement yet.

c. Topic

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  35 Interesting :87% Uninteresting :13%

  

Figure 4.4Topic

There were th thirty four proofreaders from thirty nine p participants who stated that the wri writing that they read had interesting topic. T c. The rest of the

proofreaders or fiv five proofreaders stated that the writing that hat they read had

uninteresting topic. ic. Four proofreaders from thirty four proofrea readers who stated

that the writing th that they read had interesting topic did not g t give any reason

related to their state tatement.

  For the examp mple, the essay entitled Don’t Burn Your Mo oney. This essay

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case, the proofreaders considered whether the writing was interesting or not

based on the arguments which were provided by the writer.

  Some others considered that the essay had an interesting or meaningful

topic if the essay could enrich the readers’ knowledge. It gave the readers

additional information about something. For the example, the essay entitled

Love Keeps You Healthy, this essay explained that love also could give

positive effects on physical health. Thus, the writers tried to persuade the

readers to love each other and reduce anger in ourselves. Based on the

proofreader, this essay had interesting topic because she as the reader also

could get some additional knowledge that love had some positive effects on

health.

  For the essay entitled Stay Away from Dairy Milk and The Ring

Change Your Life. The proofreader argued that the topic of these writings

were interesting because the writers explained new topics which were rarely

explained by others so that the readers could get some knowledge related to the

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  that cosmetic surge up a debatable topi

d. The Clarity of D

  Based on the da rgery now became a trend for many people. Th pic, the readers would be more curious to read of Discussions/Arguments

Figure 4.5 The Clarity of Discussions/Arguments

  data, there were twenty seven proofreaders f Clea Unc

  37 Through bringing ad the essay. from thirty nine

  Clear:69% Unclear :31 %

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  38 Twelve proofreaders from thirty nine or 30.7% proofreaders stated that the

essays which were read by them had unclear discussions. All of them could give

comments or suggestions to improve the discussion of their friends’ writing.

  Example 1, the writing entitled Tying the Knots and Its Advantages for a Man The proofreader of this essay stated that this writing did not have clear

discussions/argumentation because some arguments were confusing and needed

more explanations and examples in a real life or implementations in a real life.

Based on this comments, the writer could revise and improve her argumentation

in her writing.

  Example 2, the writing entitled Don’t Burn Your Money The proofreader of this essay stated that most of the writer’s arguments

were not strong enough to persuade people. The proofreader also gave

suggestions to the writer to give some more evidences and reasons. Think about

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e. The Relevance Inf Information to the Topic

  Relevance nce :89% Unrelevanc vance :11%

F Figure 4.6 The Relevance Information to The Topic

  Giving Reasons :6 s :63% Did not give reaso easons 37%

Figure 4.7 The Information is Related to the Topic F

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  40 For the example, the essay entitled Lets’ visit Pamanukan, the

proofreader argued that this essay gave detailed explanations and information

about Pamanukan so that the reader interested in visiting Pamanukan. The

writer could persuade the readers to visit Pamanukan because she gave

relevance information in her writing’s composition. Another example is the

essay entitled Stay Away from Dairy Milk, the proofreader of this essay

stated that this essay had relevance information to the topic because the writer

provided some data, evidences, and from different sources which supported the

idea of this essay.

  The rest of the proofreaders or four proofreaders stated that the essay

which they read had no relevance information to the topic. All of them could

give the argumentations related to their statement. For the example, the essay

entitled Why Teenagers should Think Twice to Get Married Early, the

proofreader considered that this essay had no relevance idea because the writer

just took the data from one source and there were only few evidences and

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2. Organization

a. The Clarity of the Introduction, Body, and Conclusion

  In this part, the researcher would like to find out how the participants gave some comments related to the introduction, body, and the conclusion of their friends’ writings. The first example is the essay entitled Stay Away from Dairy Milk. In this essay, the writer told about that milk was not as healthy as what we thought. The proofreader of this essay stated that this essay had a simple and clear introduction and body. However, the conclusion of this essay was too simple so that it could not convince the reader. Besides that, the proofreader also gave suggestion to the writer to write more convincing conclusion with a clear summary. The proofreader’s comments were really useful to develop the writing so it could be more interesting. Here, we could see that the proofreader not only could decide whether the essay had clear introduction, body, and conclusion or not but also the proofreader could state their reasons even the proofreaders also could give suggestions to the writer

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could get some feedback or recommendations to add more data and evidence

so that the composition of his essay would be better.

  The next example is the essay entitled Why People Should not Take

Cosmetic Surgery which told that cosmetic surgery could cause bad impacts

not only on the physical but also on psychological. The proofreader stated that

the introduction, body, and conclusion of this essay were unclear. Further, she

explained that it was caused by some errors on grammar and dictions which

could make the readers could not really understand about the idea of this essay

  Another example is the essay entitled Tying Knots and Its Advantages

for a Man. This essay persuaded the readers to get married rather than being a

single. According the proofreader, this essay had a clear introduction.

  

However, in the body, the writer should make the discussion clearer. The

writer should give more arguments and explanations. The writer also could

give some examples in a real life. Besides that, the proofreader suggested the

writer to put some recommendation in the conclusion so that it could more

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b. Topic Sentence

  In this part, the researcher wanted to know how the participants analyzed

which sentences that became the topic sentences of their friend’s writing. The

data revealed that 38 proofreaders from 39 participants 97.4% of participants

stated that each paragraph had a clear topic sentence. They also could analyze

and gave comments on the sentence which became the topic sentence of their

friend’s writing. One proofreader stated that not all of the paragraphs on the

writing which she read had a clear topic sentence.

  On the essay entitled Why We Should Prevent Teen Pregnancy, the

proofreader said that the topic sentence in each paragraph of this essay was

clear. The proofreader also could state the sentence which become its topic

sentence and gave some comments about them. Based on her comment, she

said that the topic sentence of the first paragraph isteen pregnancy can be get

harm on teenagers’ future. The topic sentence of second paragraph is teen

pregnancy can be a bad effect on infant. And the topic sentence for third

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our body. The second is a taking a nap can decrease our stress. And the last

topic sentence is taking a nap can decrease the risk of heart attack.

c. The Connectives

  In this part, the researcher wanted to find out how the participants gave

feedback to their friend’s writing related to the connectives which they used in

their writing composition. The researcher would like to find out how the

participants who were the fourth semester students corrected their friends’

writing related to the connective words that they used in their composition.

Thirty two proofreaders from thirty nine participants stated that all of the

connective word on the writings which they read used appropriately. The rest

of the participants or seven proofreaders stated that there were some

connectives word on the writing which they corrected used inappropriately.

  There were some corrections which were given by the proofreader related to the connective words that their friend’s used in their writings.

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  45 Example 3 From the last data, in 2010, the number of organ donor decrease from 2009, from 285 donors to be 242 donors. Exactly, the number of ill patients waiting for organs increases.

  Therefore, On the essay entitled We Need a Printed Media, proofreader suggested

the writer to use therefore as a connective word to substituted so. The

proofreader argued that the writer had used the word so as the connective word

too much and it could cause repetition which made the readers bored. Another

example is essay entitled Lets Visit Pamanukan, the proofreader said that

there was no inappropriate connectives which was used by the writer.

  

However, the proofreader suggested the writer to vary the connectives words

that she used. It would make her essay was not monotonous.

d. The Conclusion

  In this part, the researcher wanted to find out how the participants gave

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conclusion of the essay which they read did not wrap up the writers’ idea and

leave the readers feeling satisfied. One of them did not give further reasons.

  For the example the essay entitled Finding the Benefits of Taking a Nap,

the proofreader said that the conclusion of this essay wrapped up the writer’s

idea. However, it should be better if the writer gave recommendation without

this kind of sentence “I hope you agree with me and start to take a nap with no

doubt.” The words “I hope” did not persuade the readers well. Another

example which almost the same as the first example was on the essay entitled

Against Death Penalty, the proofreader of this essay said that the conclusion

of this essay wrapped up the writer’s idea. However, it should be better if the

writer did not use the word “ in my opinion” because it was not strong enough

to persuade people. “In my opinion, the state and citizen must respect and

uphold the basic human right.”

  For the essays entitled, Smoking Area should be Banned, Let’s Us Do

Abstinence, They are not you’re Little Baby Dolls, Students Should have

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also leaved the reader feeling satisfied. However they did not give any

explanation or comment about that. Eleventh proofreaders from thirty nine

participants stated that the essays which had been read by them wrapped up the

writer’s idea and also leave the reader feeling satisfied.

  For the example the essays entitled, Breathe Healthy, Live happily, the

proofreaders said that the conclusion of this essay wrapped up the writer’s idea

and had good conclusion, “Keep in mind that smoking has harmful effects that

can end up claiming life”. Another example is an essay entitled A

Handkerchief can Help Saving the World, according the proofreader, this

essay had an interesting conclusion which was “What are you waiting for?

Change now and move now.”

  There were seven proofreaders from thirty nine participants who stated

that the conclusion of the essays did not wrap up the writer’s idea and did not

leave the reader feeling satisfied. One of those seven proofreaders did not give

any explanation

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proofreader also st stated that he could not be persuaded since he he could not find

clear and reliable a e arguments in the body.

  Another exam ample is the essay entitled Giving a Piec iece of Life, the

proofreader argued ed that the writer should conclude the argum umentation in the

conclusion; she al also should put some persuasive sentence t e to convince the

reader.

3. Language Accur uracy

a. Tenses

  Incorrec rrect :46% Correct ect

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  49 Giving co g comments or correctio ctions :89% No comm omment 11%

  

Figure 4.9Incorrect Tenses

Two proofread eaders from eighteen participants who stated ed that there were

some incorrect ten tenses on the essays which they corrected di did not give any

correction on the e essays so that it could make the writers we were confused in

which part the inc incorrect tenses. One of the proofreaders fro from the eighteen

lth with Organic participants who o corrected the essay entitled, Life Health

Coffee, just stated ed that the incorrect tenses on the essay were i e in the paragraph

1, the last sentence ce, in the paragraph 3, the first sentence and i d in the paragraph

4, the first and the he last sentence. However, the proofreader did id not point which

the incorrect tenses ses were, she also did not give any correction.

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correction which was, “…which I was found around me…(correct).” Another

example was, “A girl will do an abortion (incorrect)”, according to the

proofreader, the tenses on that sentence was wrong and her correction was, “A

girl will doing an abortion (correct).” However, actually the tenses of the writer

was correct and the correction given by the proofreader was incorrect because

after modal (will) is followed by verb 1 so that the sentence “A girl will do an

abortion” is correct.

  Fourteen proofreaders of the eighteen participants who stated that there

were some incorrect tenses of the essay which they read gave good correction

on their friends’ essays. For the example, the essay entitled, “Don’t Burn Your

Money”, the corrections given by the proofreader was correct and clear. She

stated that the tenses of this sentence “…milk is also improve the risk of

prostate...” was wrong. She corrected that sentence became “milk also

improves the risk….” Another example is the essay entitled “People should

Aware of Their children Obesity”, the proofreader stated that, in this essay,

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b. Vocabulary

  In this part, the researcher wanted to find out how the participants gave

feedbacks to their friend’s writing related to the vocabularies which were used

on the essay. Twenty one proofreaders from thirty nine participants stated that

there were some vocabularies on the essays which they corrected were

incorrect in form and context. One of those twenty one proofreaders did not

point which the vocabulary were less appropriate in the context of the sentence

so that it could make the writer became confused in revising her essay.

  For the example the essay entitled Finding the benefits of taking a nap.

The proofreader corrected two sentences containing some incorrect words in

form. “Do you know if take a nap is beneficial for us?” Based on the

proofreader, the word take a nap was incorrect in form. The correction given

by the proofreader was “Do you if taking a nap is beneficial for us?”. The

word take a nap on that sentence should be a noun not a verb, so it should be

“taking a nap.” Another example from that essay was the sentence “ It can

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be “statements”. A . Another example is the essay entitled Giving ng a Piece of Life.

Based on the pro proofreader there was a sentence which sou sounds ridiculous

because an incorre rrect word in context which was “Organ d donation is very

needed by a lot of of ill patients.” Based on the proofreader, the he word ill on that

sentence should be be omitted because it sounds ridiculous. Anoth other example is a

sentence on the ess essay entitled Using the Second Stuff to Safe t fe the World. The

proofreader correct ected a sentence containing an incorrect word ord in form which

was “Every gende nder has the same opportune to explore…” ” Based on the

proofreader the w word “opportune” was incorrect in form, rm, it should be

“opportunity”.

c. Passive Voi oice

  All Correct rects : 80% Incorrect : ct : 20%

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proofreaders also could give correct corrections on those incorrect sentences.

The rest of the proofreaders stated that there was no incorrect passive voice

form on the writing which they read.

  First Example is the essay entitled Against death Penalty in Indonesia,

the proofreader of that essay stated that there was a sentence containing an

incorrect passive sentence which was “It is prove that government

uses….”.According to the proofreader, that sentence was incorrect, it should be

It is proved that government uses…,” Second example is the essay entitled Finding the Benefits from Taking a

Nap . The proofreader of that essay stated that there was a sentence containing

an incorrect passive sentence which was “All things are good when they done

in…”According to the proofreader, that sentence was incorrect, it should be

All things are good when they are done in….” Third example is the essay entitled, They are not your Little Baby Dolls.

  

The proofreader of that essay stated that there was a sentence containing an

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4. Mechanics

a. Punctuation M n Mark

  Used Appropr ropriately : 74% Used Inapprop propriately 26%

Figure 4.11 Punctuation Mark

  Based on the e data, there were ten proofreaders who said id that there were

commas, semi colo olons, and other punctuations marks used inapp appropriately. The

rest of the proofr ofreaders or twenty nine proofreaders said d that all of the

punctuations marks rks on the writings which they read were used a d appropriately.

  For the examp mple, the essay entitled Smoking in Public A c Area should be

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by smoking….” The proofreader state that it should be “As a result , several

lung diseases caused by smoking….”

  Another example is the essay entitled Teenagers Listening Hip Hop, the

proofreader corrected a sentence containing an incorrect punctuation mark, “So

it is not surprising, if the teenagers….”The proofreader said that comma should

not be put before “if”.

b. Spelling

  Based on the data, there were six proofreaders who stated that there were some words which were incorrect in spelling.

  Criteria Respondents Title Point to be

  Considered Response

  Comments Yes No

  1 Live, Life Health with Organic Coffee

  Are there Presevere is incorrect in spelling, it should be preserve.

  2 Tying the Knots and Its Advantages for a

  Because you have you own family…

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B. Data Presentations and Discussions on the Results of 2 Semesters

Students’ Feedback to Their Peers’ Writing The data were gathered from the first draft of the second semester students

who were taking Paragraph Writing Class with their friends’ feedback on it based

on the writing feedback checklist which had been provided by the researcher. The

data were gathered on May 2012 until June 2012. There were 75 participants who

filled out the instruments which had been distributed. The participants consisted

of the students of Class A, Class C, and Class D. The researcher analyzed 35

which were chosen randomly from all of the participants.

1. Content

  In this study, the researcher wanted to figure out how the second semester

students gave feedbacks on the content to their friend’s writing. There were some

points provided by the researcher as the guideline when the participants gave

feedback on the content of their friends’ writings.

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  Example 1 The title of the w In a village nam When we go along it fresh air. The fresh a land….. (Sample no.8

  From this parag unclear topic sentenc unclear purpose.

  The rest of the p clear purpose. There w their friends’ writing r writing is Bukit Kaba amed Sindang Jati, a rural part which wrinkle it, a wonderful hill named Bukit Kaba welco h air is produces by shady trees which stand a o.8) agraph, the proofreader concluded that this nce so that the proofreader stated that the w e participants stated that the writings which t e were three ways on how the proofreaders gav g related to the clarity of the writing’s purpose.

  Restate the purp not give argume Restate the

  57 kles like a snake. lcomes us with its d around farmers’ is writing had an writing also had h they read had a gave comments on se. purpose, did ument = 56%

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clear. Second, the proofreaders could state the purpose of their friends’ writing

and gave the appropriate arguments why the said that the purpose was clear.

  

Third, the proofreaders stated that the writing’s purpose was clear but they did not

state what the writing’s purpose was.

  Example 1 The title of the writing is My Nice Room My room is a source of inspirations and looks very enjoyable. In the entry door, I stick some clouds that I cut from many papers….

  The proofreader stated that the writing had a clear purpose shown by a clear

topic sentence. However the proofreader did not state what the topic sentence of

this writing was and what the purpose of the writing was Example 2

  The title of the writing is My Cozy Room

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  59 My bedroom is a tidy and comfortable place. My bedroom is huge enough for me…. The proofreader said that the writing had a clear purpose. She argued the

writer made the sentences related with the topic sentence. From the arguments the

researcher thought that it could not be a base why the proofreader stated that the

writings’ purpose was clear.

b) The Developing Ideas

  In this part, the researcher would like to analyze the proofreaders’

understanding about the developing ideas of their friends’ writing, whether the

writing they ready the ideas of the writings which they read was developed

successfully or not. The researcher also would like to know the reasons of the

participants’ statements.

  There were two proofreaders who stated that the ideas of the writing which

they read did not develop successfully. The first writing entitled My Nice Room,

The proofreaders stated that the ideas of the writing did not develop successfully

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successfully. Here some examples of writing which the proofreaders gave some

reasons why they stated it had good developing ideas.

  Example 1, the writing entitled My Bedroom. The proofreader stated that

the ideas of the writing were connected to each other so that the writer had been

developed the ideas well. It made the readers understood about the topic My bedroom is a tidy and comfortable place. My bedroom is huge enough for me. When you enter my bedroom, you will find a table on the left side of the door. The lamp and the alarm clock are tidily arranged above the table. Next to the table is the restful single bed. It is covered by a piece of flower sheet. A piece of soft blue blanket lies at the top of the bed. Opposite to the bed, there is a wooden-made bookshelf. All of the books are arranged pretty good…. (Sample no.6)

  Example 2, the writing entitled Gardu Pandang Gardu Pandang is the beautiful place that I have ever visited. It is located in Kaliurang near Merapi Mountain. There are many plants along the winding road to go there; it makes the air cooler. So many people are really enjoying the fresh atmosphere in that place. We can go there by “Kereta Kelinci” which is not too expensive. The design of the “Kereta Kelinci” is classic so it is really interesting for the tourists who spend their holiday…. (Sample no.12)

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2. Organization

a. The Clarity of Topic Sentence

  In this part, the researcher would like to find out how the participants gave

some comments related to the topic sentence of the writing which they read.

  

Based on the data, there were three proofreaders who stated that the topic

sentence of the writings which they read ware unclear. All of them gave some

reasons related to their statement.

  Example 1, the writing entitled My Cozy Room This writing consisted of two paragraphs. According to the proofreader, the

first paragraph of this writing had a clear topic sentence. However, the second

paragraph did not have a topic sentence

  First paragraph: My room is an interesting and cozy place. It’s almost two years I live there. My room is in the second floor…. (Sample no.4)

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  62 Example 3, the writing entitled My Lovely Bedroom. I want to tell you about the place that I really love the most. That is my favorite place. I do anything and wasting my time at that place. The place is my bedroom. My room is the most comfortable place for me.

  The proofreader said that the topic sentence was unclear because there were

ineffective sentence. It looked like the writer write two topic sentences in

paragraph.

  The rest of the proofreaders or thirty two proofreaders stated that the

writings that they read had a clear topic sentence. However, both of them did not

state what the topic sentence of the writing which they read was. For the example,

the writing entitled A Little Part of Japan, the proofreader of this writing said

that this writing had a clear topic sentence. However the proofreader did not

mention what the topic sentence was. She just said that it would better if the

writer also gave her personal opinion. Another example is the writing entitled My

Most Admirable Person. The Proofreader did not state what the topic sentence

of this writing was although she stated that it had a clear topic sentence. She just

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entitled Mini Library. The proofreader of this writing said that the topic sentence

of this writing was Mini Library is the coziest place in my grandparents’ house.

b. The Title Reflects the Writings’ Idea

  In this part, the researcher would like to know the participants’ point of view

related to the writings’ title, whether it has reflected and related to the ideas of the

writing or not. Based on the data, it revealed that all of the participants stated that

the title of the writing has reflected the writing’s ideas.

3. Language Accuracy

  There were two points which had to be considered in this part which were the ambiguous words and also the tenses.

a. The Ambiguous Words

  In this part, the researcher wanted to find out whether the proofreaders who

were the second semester students could give feedbacks on their peer’s writing

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  64 The next were my parents’ bedroom and my bedroom. Both of them were quiet small.

  The proofreader said that the sentence both of them were quiet small

becomes ambiguous because the misspelled word which was quite gave different

meaning from the correct meaning which was intended. It should be both of them

were quite small.

  Example 3, the writing entitled Beras Basa Beach

There are some nuts that covered by trees for the visitors to eat.

  The proofreader said that this sentence was ambiguous but she did not give further explanations or revised the sentence became the correct one.

  Example 4, the writing entitled Mini Library Beside the usefulness of this room, it is also our place to share everything.

  

The proofreader stated that the correct sentence should be besides sthe usefulness

of this room, it is also our place to share everything. It because the correct

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  65 Based on the data, there were eleven proofreaders who stated that there

were some incorrect tenses which their peers used. All of them could correct those

incorrect tenses.

  Point to be Response Criteria Respondents Title Comments

  Considered Yes No

  My Nice It will brings a Room good impact….

  1 It should be

  bring

  The wall made from wood and the roof made 2 My Old from…. Home Passive voice, it should be was

  made

  Gardu So many people Pandang really enjoying ….

  3 So many people really Does the enjoy…. Language paragraph use

  My Most The listener is Use correct forms

  Admirable also enjoy her of the tenses? Person playing.

  4 The listener also enjoys her playing

  My The bookshelf

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  Point to be Respond Criteria Respondents Title Comments

  Considered Yes No

  Mini This room just Library have a

  7 window….

  The room just has a window…. My Idol He wear glasses.

  He wears glasses. He’s teach Indonesian

  8 Language He teaches….

  He always teach his children…. Does the

  He always Language paragraph use teaches….

  Used correct forms The She always try of the tenses? Greatest her best to 9 Person in give….

  My Life She always tries her best…. The Most Now, he go for Famous his ….

  10 Couch Now he is going for his….

  My Lovely Finally my Grandpa grandpa make me feel….

  11 Finally my grandpa makes me feel….

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  quiet quite My old home was a simpel…. simple simple My old home had no bathroo…. bathroo bathroom

  Characteristic

  The Greatest characteriskic

  8 My Idol slented slanted

  Library Beside besides

  7 Mini

  Bedroo m parfum perfume soon so on

  6 My

  Univers ity Library newpaper newspa per

  5 Our

  Beloved House sometime sometimes singel single

  4 My

  67 Criteria Respondents Title Point to be

  Considered Response Comments Yes No

  Home Both of them were

  3 My Old

  There is a wardrope…. Wardrobe wardrobe

  There are misspelling words

  Cozy Room

  2 My

  Bad bed

  Misspelling words My bad is simple.

  Nice Room

  1 My

  Mechanic

  quiet small

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b. Punctuation marks

  Based on the data, there were eleventh proofreaders who said that there were

commas, semi colons, and other punctuations marks used inappropriately. The

rest of the proofreaders or twenty four proofreaders said that all of the

punctuations marks on the writings which they read were used appropriately.

  Some of the writers usually forgot to put full stop on the last sentence. For

the example, the essay entitled My Old Home. Based on the proofreader’s

correction there was a sentence which the writer forgot to put full stop on the last

of that sentence, If the night comes, the kitchen room was really without “lampu

senthir” . Another example, the essay entitled My Bedroom. The writer also did

not put a full stop in the last sentence of her writing, Besides strategic, my

bedroom is also spacious .

  Another problem which occurred related to the punctuation marks was the

writer did not put comma before and after mentioning several items. For the

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writing entitled My Lovely Bedroom, it is the example On the top of the table

there is…., it should be On the top of the table , there is….

c. Capitalization

  Based on the data, it revealed that there were four proofreaders

mentioned some incorrect capitalization words on the writing which they read. It

was related to the capital word on the writing’s title. For the example, the writer

wrote My room as hers writing’s title, it should be My Room. Another example,

the writer wrote My nice room as her writing’s title, it should be My Nice Room.

Another example is on a sentence of the writing entitled Beras Basa Beach, My

favorite place in my hometown is Beras Basa beach. It should be, my favorite

place in my hometown is Bera Basa Beach. nd th

  

C. The Comparison between 2 and 4 Semester Students Ability in Giving

Feedback to Their Peers’ Writing nd

  Based on the data results, there were different abilities between 2 and

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organization of their friends’ writing their friends’ writing. They also could give

some suggestions to improve their friends’ writing.

  On language use and mechanic aspects both second and fourth semester

students could give clear feedback on their friends’ writing. They could mention

some incorrect parts of their friends’ writing related to those aspects. They also

could give corrections and suggestions to help their friends revised their writings.

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CHAPTER V CONCLUSIONS AND RECOMMENDATIONS This chapter covers two main parts, namely conclusions and

  

recommendations. The first part presents the conclusion derived from the

research. The second part presents the recommendations intended for the teacher

and the students.

A. Conclusions

  This research is intended to find out to what extent second semester

students and fourth semester students can give feedback to their friend’s writing.

  

There is a main research problem to answer in this study. The research problem

nd th

was about to what extent 2 semester students and 4 semester students give

feedback to their friend’s writing. Based on the data results and discussion in the

previous chapter, the researcher would like to draw a conclusion.

  The second semester students and the fourth semester students had

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improvement. They did not only concern on the surface errors of writing such as

punctuation marks, tenses, capitalization and so on but also they put focus on the

content aspect. On the contrary, the second semester students concern more on the

surface errors of the writing. They concern more on correcting the incorrect

grammars, punctuations, spellings, and others related to the mechanic and

language use. Most of main corrections made by second semester students on their

peers’ writing involved the corrections on grammatical and orthographic errors.

They seemed confused in giving comments related to the content and writing’s

organization. Their comment on the writing’s content and organization were not

detailed enough. The second semester students’ feedback focused on the writing’s

form while the fourth semester students concern on writing’ content and writing’s

form.

B. Recommendation

  After conducting the study, the researcher proposes some

recommendations for the English teachers and the students of English Education

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  72 class discussion and encourage the students to ask questions about the feedback that their peers give to them so it encourages the students’ critical thinking skill

2) For the Students The students should be proactive in doing peer feedback activity.

  They should be proactive in giving feedback for their friends’ writing and revising their own writing. Besides, the students should keep on practicing writing a composition so it can help them to improve their writing skill.

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Letters of Permission

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The Checklist Result of 2 Semester Students in Giving Feedback to Their

Peers’ Writing

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No A little Part of Japan

  The purpose is clear shown by a clear topic sentence. The purpose

  1 is to describe the writer’s room which looks like Japanese house.

  My Room The writing purpose is clear.

  2 Some sentences show the purpose why her room is he favorite place My Nice Room

  She writes the clear topic

  3 sentence. It makes the readers know about the paragraph

  My Cozy Room The purpose of the writing is

  The writing’s purpose is

  4 clear. It tells her room which is clear shown by a clear interesting and cozy to her

  Content topic sentence

  My Old Home The purpose of the writing is to

  (What is the purpose of the

  5 give the description of her old writing?) home

  My Bedroom The writer makes the sentences

  6 related with the topic sentence.

  Keteb She writes the purpose of the

  7 writing clearly

  Bukit Kaba The purpose is not clear shown by the clear topic sentence. I think the writer wants to describe about

  8 Bukit Kaba but unfortunately the topic sentence is not clear enough.

  nd

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No My Bedroom

  She has shown a clear topic sentence so the writing’s purpose is 9 clear.

  Example : My bedroom is tidy and comfortable place My Beloved House

  The writer tells about her house

  10 and she makes a clear topic sentence.

  Indrayanti Beach The purpose is clear. It describes

  11 about Indrayanti Beach

  Gardu Pandang The writer tells about her favorite

  12 Is the writing’s purpose place, Gardu Pandang. clear?

  Content Our University Library The writing is very detail and 13 (What is the purpose of the consistent to the topic sentence. writing?)

  My Most Admirable To show the person whom the

  14 Person writer admire most

  My Bedroom The purpose is clear. It tells that

  15 her bedroom is very comfortable for her and it has a lot of stuff.

  My Bedroom The writer has a good topic sentence. The writer’s purpose is to

  16 show how comfortable her bedroom is.

  My Room The writing purpose is clear. The

  17 writer wants to tell her small and

  nd

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No

  17 My Room Well-organized room.

  BerasBasa Beach It’s clear because the writing shows

  18 clearly about what it wants to tell.

  My Wizard place The purpose is clear because she

  19 writes a clear topic sentence which describes her room

  Mini Library The writing’s purpose is telling about the coziness of her

  20 grandparents’ mini library. It has good topic sentence.

  Is the writing’s purpose My Boarding House

  The topic sentence is clear. It clear? Content describes about the writer’s favorite 21 (What is the purpose of place in Sanata Dharma which is the the writing?) Hall. The Hall

  To give the reader such a knowledge

  22 that breakfast is important

  My Mother He writes a clear and good topic sentence so the writing’s purpose

  23 becomes clear.

  “My mom’s behavior has put her as the most admirable person for me.” My Idol The purpose is clear.

  24

  nd

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  Respond Criteria Respondent The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No The Greatest Person in My The purpose is to tell that the

  25 Life writer’s mother is the greatest person in her life.

  My favorite Place The purpose is clear because it has a

  26 clear topic sentence.

  27 The Most Famous Couch He told about his favorite couch.

  Ganjuran Church The writings purpose is to describe

  28 Ganjuran Churh.

  My Father The purpose is to show how good

  29 his father so it makes her admires him.

  My Artistic Room The purpose is stated clearly. He

  Is the writing’s purpose wants to tell that the most artistic

  30 clear? room in his house is his bedroom. Content

  (What is the purpose of the writing?) My Schoolmate

  The writer describes her schoolmate who becomes the most interesting 31 person for her.

  My Lovely Granpa The writers describes about her Grandpa. It has a clear topic sentence

  32 “My Grandpa is the person that I admire most.

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No The Interesting girl in My The writing’s purpose is clear. It has mind a clear topic sentence.

  33 “Raisa, a girl, who is very

  Is the writing’s purpose clear? interesting in my mind.” Content

  Josh Groban (What is the purpose of The writer describes about the

  34 the writing?) physical appearance of Josh Groban My Most Admirable

  The writer tells about her friend,

  35 Person Nana, she has some great talents so the writer admires her.

  Total

  34

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No The Little Part of Japan

  The writing develops successfully so it makes me interesting in reading the 1 writing.

  My Room The writing develops successfully

  2 just need some sentences to add the information about her room.

  My Nice Room The writer needs more details and

  3 interesting things because it is too clueless.

  My Cozy Room Yes, all of the ideas are developed

  4 successfully.

  The Ideas Develop Content

  5 My Old Home Successfully

  My Bedroom Yes but I think it will be better if the

  6 writer makes more detail

  7 Keteb Bukit Kaba

  The idea develops successfully although the writer does not write a

  8 clear topic sentence but she writes the supporting ideas in a good way.

  9 My Bedroom The ideas are connected to each other

  My Beloved House The ideas develop successfully

  10 because she explains completely.

  11 Indrayanti Beach

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  18 BerasBasa Beach

  26 My Favorite Place It really describe your life style

  25 The Greatest Person in My Life

  24 My Idol

  23 My Mother

  22 The Hall

  21 My Boarding House

  20 Mini Library She tells how cozy her grandfather’s mini library is

  19 My Wizard Place She develops her topic sentence successfully

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  16 My Bedroom The writer arranges the sentence until it becomes a good paragraph and has good ideas

  15 My Bedroom Every supporting detail has been developed successfully.

  14 My Most Admirable Person

  13 Our University Library

  Successfully Yes, I got the ideas of the paragraph because the writer explains clearly.

  12 Gardu Pandang The Ideas Develop

  Content

  Comments Yes No

  17 My room

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No The Most Famous

  Yes she can show it through the

  27 Couch sentences.

  28 Ganjuran Church

  29 My Father My Artistic Room

  The supporting sentences are good

  30 but there is no controlling idea in topic sentence.

  The Ideas Develop Content My Schoolmate

  The paragraphs clearly described

  31 Successfully about Indah

  32 My Lovely Grandpa The Interesting girl in

  The supporting paragraph explains

  33 My mind clearly about Raisa.

  34 Josh Groban My Most Admirable

  35 Person Total

  33

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No A little Part of Japan

  However the writer has to give her

  1 opinion.

  My Room Paragraph 1 : My room is my

  2 favorite place

  My Nice Room My room is a source of inspirations

  3 and looks very enjoyable.

  My Cozy Room Paragraph 1 has a topic sentence as a controlling idea , “ My room is an

  4 interesting and cozy place.” However, paragraph 2 does not have a topic sentence.

  Is there a clear topic My Old Home

  Paragraph 1 : My old home is a sentence in each paragraph?

  5 simple and small home located in Jambi but far from the city.

  Organization My Bedroom

  My Bedroom is strategic and

  6 suspicious

  Keteb Keteb is an interesting and clean

  7 place

  Bukit Kaba The writer doest not write a clear topic sentence. The topic sentence is

  8 not match with the hills’ description and also the concluding paragraph.

  My Bedroom My bedroom is a tidy and

  9 comfortable place.

  My Beloved House My house is an interesting place

  10

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Indrayanti Beach

  Indrayanti is the most beautiful beach

  11 that I know.

  Gardu Pandang Gardu Pandang is the most beautiful

  12 place that I have ever visited.

  Our University Library Our university library is a strategic

  13 and well-organized place.

  My Most Admirable About the writer best friend.

  14 Person My Bedroom

  My bedroom is the most comfortable

  15 room for me.

  My Bedroom Is there a clear topic My bedroom in my boarding house is

  16 Organization sentence in each paragraph? the most comfortable place.

  My Lovely Bedroom The topic sentence is not clear because there are ineffective

  17 sentence. It looks like the writer write two topic sentences in paragraph .

  BerasBasa Beach My favorite place in my hometown is

  18 BerasBasa Beach.

  My Wizard Place The most magical place that I have

  19 ever have is my bedroom.

  Mini Library Mini Library is the coziest place in

  20 my grandparents’ house.

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No My Boarding House

  The topic sentence is clear but it will be better if you write “My boarding

  21 house is beautiful.” It more effective and understandable.

  The Hall My favorite place in Sanata Dharma

  22 is Mrican Hall

  My Mother My mom’s behavior has put has as

  23 the person that I admire.

  24 My Idol The Greatest Person in

  My mom is the greatest person in my

  25 My Life life..

  My Favorite Place One of my favorite places to relax is

  26 my bedroom.

  Is there a clear topic The Most Famous

  I have someone whom I admires the Organization

  27 sentence in each paragraph Couch most, he is Sir Alex Ferguson

  Ganjuran Church Ganjuran Church is a unique and

  28 sacred place

  29 My Father The person that I admire is my father

  My Artistic Room I think my bedroom is the most artistic room in my house.

  30 It will be better if the writer omits the word “I think” My Schoolmate

  The most interesting peson that I

  31 have ever known is my schoolmates.

  My Lovely Grandpa My Grandpa is the person that I admire most

  32

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  Comments Yes No

  Content

  33 The Interesting girl in My mind Is there a clear topic sentence in each paragraph

  (What is the thesis statement) Raisa, a girl, who is very interesting person in my mind.

  34 Josh Groban Josh Groban is a famous and handsome singer who I admire most

  35 My Most Admirable Person

  My best friend, nana , is admiring for me by her great talents Total

  32

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  28 Ganjuran Church It reflects the topic of the writing

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  It reflects the topic of the writing Total

  35 My Most Admirable Person

  34 Josh Groban It reflects the topic of the writing

  33 The Interesting girl in My mind It reflects the topic of the writing

  32 My Lovely Grandpa It reflects the topic of the writing

  31 My Schoolmate It reflects the topic of the writing

  30 My Artistic Room It reflects the topic of the writing

  29 My Father It reflects the topic of the writing

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  26 My Favorite Place It reflects the topic of the writing

  It reflects the topic of the writing

  25 The Greatest Person in My Life

  24 My Idol It reflects the topic of the writing

  23 My Mother It reflects the topic of the writing

  22 The Hall It reflects the topic of the writing

  It reflects the topic of the writing.

  21 My Boarding House Does the title reflect the topic of the writing?

  Organization

  Comments Yes No

  27 The Most Famous Couch It reflects the topic of the writing

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  10 My Beloved House It reflects the topic of the writing

  20 Mini Library It reflects the topic of the writing

  19 My Wizard Place It reflects the topic of the writing

  18 BerasBasa Beach It reflects the topic of the writing

  17 My Lovely Bedroom It reflects the topic of the writing

  16 My Bedroom It reflects the topic of the writing

  15 My Bedroom It reflects the topic of the writing

  It reflects the topic of the writing

  14 My Most Admirable Person

  13 Our University Library It reflects the topic of the writing

  12 Gardu Pandang It reflects the topic of the writing

  11 Indrayanti Beach It reflects the topic of the writing

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  8 Bukit Kaba It reflects the topic of the writing

  7 Keteb The title reflects the writing’s topic.

  6 My Bedroom The title reflect to the topic and related to the paragraph

  5 My Old Home Yes, the title tells me about the home and the paragraph explains more about it.

  4 My Cozy Room It reflects the topic of the writing.

  3 My Nice Room It reflects the topic of the writing.

  2 My Room It reflects the topic of the writing.

  It reflects the topic of the writing.

  1 A little Part of Japan Does the title reflect the topic of the writing?

  Organization

  Comments Yes No

  9 My Bedroom It reflects the topic of the writing.

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No

  1 A little Part of Japan

  2 My Room My Nice Room

  You can see whole of my room is colored

  3 by green.

  4 My Cozy Room My Old Home

  Both of the were quiet small

  5 The word quite in that sentence must be quite

  6 My Bedroom

  7 Keteb

  8 Bukit Kaba

  9 My Bedroom My Beloved House

  10 Language Are there ambiguous

  Accuracy

  11 Indrayanti Beach words or sentences?

  12 Gardu Pandang

  13 Our University Library My Most Admirable

  14 Person

  15 My Bedroom

  16 My Bedroom

  17 My Lovely Bedroom BerasBasa Beach

  There are some nuts that covered

  18

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  27 The Most Famous Couch

  31 PLAGIAT MERUPAKAN TINDAKAN TIDAK TERPUJI

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  Total

  35 My Most Admirable Person

  34 Josh Groban

  33 The Interesting girl in My mind

  32 My Lovely Grandpa

  31 My Schoolmate

  30 My Artistic Room

  29 My Father

  28 Ganjuran Church

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  25 The Greatest Person in My Life

  24 My Idol

  23 My Mother

  22 The Hall

  21 My Boarding House

  From the context the right word is besides not beside.

  Beside the usefulness of this room, it is also our place to share everything.

  20 Mini Library

  19 My Wizard Place

  18 Beras Basa Beach Are there ambiguous words or sentences? by trees for the visitors to eat

  Language Accuracy

  Comments Yes No

  26 My Favorite Place

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No

  1 A little Part of Japan

  2 My Room My Nice Room It will brings a good impact….

  3 It should be bring

  4 My Cozy Room My Old Home

  The wall made from wood and the roof made from….

  5 Passive voice, it should be was made

  6 My Bedroom

  7 Keteb

  8 Bukit Kaba

  9 My Bedroom My Beloved House

  Does the paragraph use

  10 Language correct forms of the

  Use

  11 Indrayanti Beach tenses? Gardu Pandang So many people really enjoying ….

  12 So many people really enjoy….

  13 Our University Library My Most Admirable The listener is also enjoy her playing.

  14 Person The listener also enjoys her playing

  My Bedroom The bookshelf made from ….

  15 The bookshelf was made from….

  16 My Bedroom

  17 My Lovely Bedroom BerasBasa Beach It’s makes me misses this beach so much.

  It makes me miss this beach so much.

  18

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  25 The Greatest Person in My Life She always try her best to give….

  Finally my grandpa makes me feel….

  32 My Lovely Grandpa Finally my grandpa make me feel….

  31 My Schoolmate

  30 My Artistic Room

  29 My Father

  28 Ganjuran Church

  Now he is going for his….

  27 The Most Famous Couch Now, he go for his ….

  26 My Favorite Place

  She always tries her best….

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  He always teach his children….

  He wears glasses. He’s teach Indonesian Language He teaches….

  24 My Idol He wear glasses.

  23 My Mother

  22 The Hall

  21 My Boarding House

  The room just has a window….

  20 Mini Library This room just have a window….

  19 My Wizard Place Does the paragraph use correct forms of the tenses?

  Language Accuracy

  Comments Yes No

  He always teaches….

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No The Interesting girl in My

  33 mind Language

  34 Josh Groban Accuracy

  My Most Admirable

  35 Person Total

  11

  24

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  7 Keteb

  16 My Bedroom parfum perfume soon so on

  15 My Bedroom

  14 My Most Admirable Person

  13 Our University Library newpaper newspaper

  12 Gardu Pandang

  11 Indrayanti Beach

  10 My Beloved House sometime sometimes singel single

  9 My Bedroom

  8 Bukit Kaba

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  5 My Old Home Both of them were quiet small quiet quite My old home was a simpel…. simple simple My old home had no bathroo…. bathroo bathroom

  Wardrope wardrobe

  4 My Cozy Room There is a wardrope….

  Bad bed

  3 My Nice Room My bad is simple.

  2 My Room

  1 A little Part of Japan Are there misspelling words?

  Mechanic

  Comments Yes No

  6 My Bedroom

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  27 The Most Famous Couch affraid afraid

  23 PLAGIAT MERUPAKAN TINDAKAN TIDAK TERPUJI

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  Total

  35 My Most Admirable Person

  34 Josh Groban

  33 The Interesting girl in My mind

  32 My Lovely Grandpa

  31 My Schoolmate

  30 My Artistic Room accecories accesories

  29 My Father

  28 Ganjuran Church relaxs relaxes

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  25 The Greatest Person in My Life characteriskic Characteristic

  24 My Idol slented slanted

  23 My Mother

  22 The Hall

  21 My Boarding House

  20 Mini Library Beside besides

  19 My Wizard Place

  18 BerasBasa Beach

  17 My Lovely Bedroom Are there misspelling words?

  Mechanics

  Comments Yes No

  26 My Favorite Place

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  8 Bukit Kaba

  16 My Bedroom It reflects the topic of the writing

  In front of my bed, there is….

  15 My Bedroom In the right of the table, there is….

  14 My Most Admirable Person

  13 Our University Library

  12 Gardu Pandang It reflects the topic of the writing

  11 Indrayanti Beach

  10 My Beloved House The writer mentions several things but before “and” she does not put comma.

  9 My Bedroom Full stop must be on the last of the sentence: Besides strategic, my bedroom is also spacious.

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  7 Keteb Then there is a building….

  6 My Bedroom

  5 My Old Home If the night comes, the kitchen room was really without “lampusenthir”.

  4 My Cozy Room

  3 My Nice Room

  2 My Room

  1 A little Part of Japan\ Are there commas, semi colons , and other punctuation marks used inappropriately?

  Organizatio n

  Comments Yes No

  Then, there is a building….

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  25 The Greatest Person in My Life

  33 The Interesting girl in My mind

  32 My Lovely Grandpa In his 86, he still active in some….

  31 My Schoolmate

  30 My Artistic Room There is a beautiful room , which has….

  29 My Father

  28 Ganjuran Church Pigeons, dog, monkeys, and others….

  27 The Most Famous Couch

  26 My Favorite Place

  Although she is a hard worker, she….

  Although, she is a hard worker she …

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  23 My Mother

  22 The Hall

  21 My Boarding House

  I have many novels and comics.

  20 Mini Library I have many novels, and comics.

  19 My Wizard Place

  18 BerasBasa Beach

  On the top of the table, there is …. This bathroom is just for me, my sister, and my mother.

  17 My Lovely Bedroom Are there commas, semi colons , and other punctuation marks used inappropriately?

  Organizatio n

  Comments Yes No

  24 My Idol

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  Comments Yes No

  Mechanic

  34 Josh Groban Are there commas, semi colons , and other punctuation marks used inappropriately?

  35 My Most Admirable Person

  Total

  11

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No

  1 A little Part of Japan My Room

  The title : My room

  2 It should be My Room My Nice Room

  The title : My nice room My Nice Room

  I also write motivation notes to

  3 encourage me, If I a….

  If I stay longer in my room, It will….

  4 My Cozy Room

  5 My Old Home My Bedroom

  The title : My bedroom Are there wrong

  6 Mechanic My Bedroom capitalization?

  7 Keteb

  8 Bukit Kaba

  9 My Bedroom

  10 My Beloved House

  11 Indrayanti Beach

  12 Gardu Pandang

  13 Our University Library My Most Admirable

  14 Person

  15 My Bedroom

  16 My Bedroom My Lovely Bedroom

  17

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  27 The Most Famous Couch

  31 PLAGIAT MERUPAKAN TINDAKAN TIDAK TERPUJI

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  Total

  35 My Most Admirable Person

  34 Josh Groban

  33 The Interesting girl in My mind

  32 My Lovely Grandpa

  31 My Schoolmate

  30 My Artistic Room

  29 My Father

  28 Ganjuran Church

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  25 The Greatest Person in My Life

  24 My Idol

  23 My Mother

  22 The Hall

  21 My Boarding House

  20 Mini Library

  19 My Wizard Place

  Beras Basa Beach

  My favorite place in my hometown is BerasBasa beach.

  18 BerasBasa Beach Are there wrong capitalization?

  Organization

  Comments Yes No

  26 My Favorite Place

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APPENDIX C

The Checklist Results of 4 nd Semester Students in Giving Feedback to Their

  

Peers’ Writing

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of She has provided the issue clearly. taking a nap.

  (The purpose of the writing is to

  1 tell that taking a nap can bring benefit.)

  Against death Penalty in This should be persuasive writing

  Indonesia but it seems like argumentative

  2 after I read the essay because the language is not really influencing.

  Live, Life Health with The purpose is clear stated in thesis

  Organic Coffee statement.

  3 (To persuade the reader to drink coffee.)

  Is the writing’s purpose Tying the Knots and Its clear? The purpose of the writing is to

  Content

  4 Advantages for a Man (What is the purpose of the persuade the reader to believe the author’s opinion and do it. writing?)

  Don’t Burn Your Money She tells the disadvantages of

  5 smoking.

  Stay Away from Dairy The purpose of the article stated In

  Milk thesis statement. To persuade the

  6 reader not to drink milk because it can endanger the nature and human body

  Be Sporty-Stay Healthy Since it is persuasive essay, the

  7 essay is less persuasive

  Don’t Burn Your Money To persuade people to stop

  8 smoking

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Let’s Grow More Plant

  To persuade the reader to grow

  9 more plants and save the earth

  Finding the Benefits from The purpose of the essay actually

  10 Taking a Nap to persuade the reader that taking a nap is important.

  People should Aware of To persuade the reader to aware of

  11 Their children Obesity children obesity.

  Why We Should Prevent The writing’s purpose is clear

  Teen Pregnancy because she puts thesis statement in

  12 the beginning of the article. She also puts clear explanations.

  Is the writing’s purpose The purpose is to persuade the clear?

  Content Breathe Healthy, Live To persuade the reader to avoid 13 (What is the purpose of the

  Happily smoking writing?)

  A Handkerchief can Help Yes , the writer state the purpose

  14 Saving the World clearly. To persuade the reader to use handkerchief than tissue

  Let Us Dance The purpose is to persuade the

  15 reader to dance Javanese of traditional dance

  Smoking in Public Area The purpose is to persuade the 16 should be Banned reader to not smoking in the public area.

  Let Us Do Abstinence The writer persuade the reader to

  17 not do sex before marriage

  

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  The writing’s purpose is clear because she states all of the arguments well to persuade readers to be entrepreneurs

  The writer ask the reader to get married

  25 The Ring Changes Your Life

  The writer wants to persuade the readers that authoritative parenting is the best parenting style

  24 Being the Best Parents by Applying Authoritative Parenting

  To give the reader such a knowledge that breakfast is important

  23 Students Should have their Deluxe Breakfast before School Everyday

  22 Talk Together, Prevent the Bullying The writing’s purpose is to persuade the readers to build a dialogue between school staffs and parents for the monitoring system in school.

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  The writing purpose is to let the reader to watch western movie

  20 Let’s Watch More Western Movie

  19 Prefer Love than Violence as the Better Solution To persuade the readers especially the woman not to do abortion

  The writing’s purpose is to persuade the parents not to allow their children to join children beauty pageant

  Is the writing’s purpose clear? (What is the purpose of the writing?)

  18 They are not your Little Baby Dolls

  Content

  Comments Yes No

  21 Let’s Become Independent By Being Self Employment

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Cloud Computing to

  The writer provided the advantages

  26 Improve Effectiveness in side of issue.

  Work Giving a Piece of Life

  The writer provided 4 arguments to

  27 convince and persuade the readers to do organ donation.

  Love Keeps You Healthy To persuade the readers to love each

  28 other and reduce anger In themselves.

  Teenagers Listening Hip The writings purpose is clear, to

  29 Hop persuade the readers not to listen hip hop

  Is the writing’s purpose Lets’ Visit Pamanukan

  The purpose is stated clearly in clear? thesis statement in introduction. Content

  30 (What is the purpose of

  To persuade the readers to visit the writing?) Pamanukan

  We Need a Printed The purpose is stated clearly in

  Communication Media thesis statement in the first paragraph.

  31 The writer wants to persuade the reader to use printed media in campus to share some information. Why People Should not

  The writing’s purpose is clear from Take Care Cosmetic the explanation in the last

  Surgery paragraph.

  32 The author wants the reader to

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Why People Should not realize the danger of cosmetic

  32 Take Care Cosmetic surgery, she persuades the readers

  Surgery not to do it. Using the Second Stuff to The writing’s purpose is clearly Safe the world stated in the title and introduction.

  33 The writer wants to persuade the reader to use the second stuff.

  Lets’ Visit Pamanukan The purpose is stated in introduction

  34 clearly

  Herbal Shower and Wash The purpose is clearly stated on the Is the writing’s purpose

  Products for Reducing the thesis statement on the first Bad Effects of Global clear? paragraph. The writer persuades the

  Content

  35 (What is the purpose of

  Warming readers to reduce the effects of the writing?) worsening global warming by using herbal products.

  Parents in Children The writer has a clear propose in her

  Education writing by providing some reasons to convince the readers that parents have important role in children’s education. She persuades the readers

  36 (parents) to give good attention to their children.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Cell Phone Caused Many

  The writing’s purpose directly Accidents stated which is included the thesis

  37 statement.

  I will tell you the horrible effects of using cell phone while driving Teenagers Should be Is the writing’s purpose The writing purpose is clear. It is Taught Sex Education at clear? supported by some clear

  Content school (What is the purpose of the arguments.

  38 writing?) The writers convinced that sex education in school should be conducted.

  Start Your Life with The writing purpose is clear.

  39 Frozen Food It persuades the reader to start consuming frozen food.

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  The writer can provide the thesis taking a nap. statement clearly The benefits of taking a nap that you

  1 can find are refreshing your mind and body, decreasing stress, and decreasing the risk of heart attack).

  Against death Penalty in We have to against death penalty

  Indonesia because of it is violates religious beliefs, spend much money from the tax payer for trial new methods, and

  2 the government must ensure the right

  Is the thesis statement state for every people in this country. clearly?

  The writer should revise the thesis Content statement because there are some

  (What is the thesis errors in grammar. statement)

  Live, Life Health with The thesis statement is not clear

  Organic Coffee because it is confusing. The writer should make her sentence more

  3 meaningful and effective because it is a bit confusing due to thesis statement.

  Tying the Knots and Its Marriage helps you to have stable

  4 Advantages for a Man emotional; better financial, better sex experience and even live longer.

  Don’t Burn Your Money Thesis statement is unclear and

  5 confusing.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Stay Away from Dairy

  The writer makes a clear and good Milk thesis statement. Thesis Statement: When you are starting to drink two or

  6 three glasses of milk per day regularly. You are unintentionally starting to endanger your body and even this world.

  Be Sporty-Stay Healthy She does not mention the thesis

  7 statement yet.

  Don’t Burn Your Thesis statement is unclear.

  8 Money Is the thesis statement state clearly? Let’s Grow More Plant Thesis statement is clearly stated. Content

  You should grow more plants (What is the thesis because they are very beneficial. You statement) can have the plants’ beauty that leads to your heart pleasure, the plants can

  9 also make your mind fresh, they can make your environment healthy, and the most important thing is you can help this earth from global warming effects.

  Finding the Benefits The benefits you can find are from Taking a Nap refreshing your mind and body,

  10 decreasing stress, and decreasing the risk of heart attack.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No People should Aware of

  Some of factors that affect children Their children Obesity obesity are food choices, lack of

  11 physical activity, and also overweight parents.

  Why We Should The writing has good thesis

  Prevent Teen Pregnancy statement.

  12 In this essay, I will explain some reasons why we should prevent teen pregnancy. Breathe Healthy, Live Is the thesis statement state To make your breath healthy, you Happily clearly? should stop smoking because

  13 Content smoking gives many effects to your (What is the thesis body. statement)

  A Handkerchief can Reduce the use of tissue and move to

  Help Saving the World the handkerchief are the solutions

  14 because using handkerchief is beneficial for the users and environmentally friendly.

  Let Us Dance The thesis statement is clear.

  Dancing the Javanese traditional

  15 dances gives us many advantages, for example to train our bodies and minds.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Smoking in Public Area

  Smoking in the public area should be should be Banned banned because it endangers the non-

  16 smokers health and causes inconvenient condition for many people.

  Let Us Do Abstinence There are many reasons not to do premarital sex such as it can cause

  17 STD, unwanted pregnancy, band emotional feelings, and it against morality. They are not your Little

  Children Beauty Pageant gives Baby Dolls harmful effects for children’s

  Is the thesis statement state

  18 physical condition, makes the clearly? children mental condition bad, take a

  Content long time, and spends a lot of money.

  (What is the thesis Prefer Love than

  Make the thesis statement more statement) Violence as the Better effective. Solution

  Women should not have the abortion because by stopping the abortion, we save two different lives at the same time by giving chance to a human

  19 being to express himself and preventing the bad effects of abortion that might happen to the pregnant women, both physical and psychological health risks.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Smoking in Public Area

  Smoking in the public area should be should be Banned banned because it endangers the non-

  20 smokers health and causes inconvenient condition for many people.

  Let’s Watch More The thesis statement is clear and

  Western Movie brief.

  21 Let us watch more western movies for they are educating, fun, and cheap. Lets’ Become

  Thesis statement is clear Independent BY Being Is the thesis statement state There are four major benefits of Self-Employment clearly? becoming young entrepreneur;

  22 Content independent in financial, explore

  (What is the thesis their creativity, train their soft skill, statement) and create job-demand. Talk Together, Prevent

  Thesis statement clearly stated on the the Bullying first paragraph.

  23 The dialogue between the school staffs and Being the Best Parents

  It can be proved by following by Applying aspects/points; authoritative as the

  Authoritative Parenting best parenting style, the high

  24 standards which authoritative parents have in parenting children, the child outcomes of authoritative parents have in parenting the

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Being the Best Parents children, the child outcomes of 24 by Applying authoritative parenting, and it has

  Authoritative Parenting good dimensions. The Ring Changes Your

  Thesis statement clearly stated on the Life last sentence of the first paragraph.

  Get the stability of life; always be with our best friend all the time,

  25 share and build or dreams together with our partner, live longer are the benefits that we can get from a marriage.

  Is the thesis statement state Cloud Computing to

  The writer has not stated the thesis clearly?

  26 Improve Effectiveness in statement yet. Content

  Work (What is the thesis

  Giving a Piece of Life She stated thesis statement clearly. statement)

  27 Being organ donor is an important act to save someone’s life.

  Love Keeps You Love can give positive effects on

  28 Healthy physical health.

  Teenagers Listening Teenagers should not to listen to hip

  Hip Hop hop because it leads them to be more

  29 aggressive, using drugs, free sex, and violence.

  Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Pamanukan has two beaches which

  30

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Lets’ Visit Pamanukan are beautiful enough, some food courts which sell delicious food from

  30 other cities, strategic locations and the air is still fresh

  We Need a Printed Thesis statement is in the last part of

  Communication Media the first paragraph.

  31 This media can bring many benefits in our daily campus.

  Why People Should not There are some reasons why people

  Take Care Cosmetic should not take cosmetic surgery,

  Is the thesis statement state Surgery like spend a lot of money, bring

  32 clearly? physical risk, give the patient

  Content psychological impact and there is no

  (What is the thesis guarantee that surgery will work well statement)

  Using the Second Stuff Second stuff, actually, has its to Safe the world benefits such as help us to save

  33 money, provides us better offering, gives us new challenging, and saves the environment.

  Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Pamanukan has two beaches which are beautiful enough, some food courts which sell delicious food from

  34 other cities, strategic locations and the air is still fresh.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Lets’ Visit Pamanukan are beautiful enough, some food courts which sell delicious food from

  34 other cities, strategic locations and the air is still fresh

  Herbal Shower and Chemicals found in that product that

  Wash Products for can cause global warming.

  35 Reducing the Bad Effects of Global Warming Parents in Children’s The thesis of the writing is clear. Education Is the thesis statement state Thesis Statement : There are four

  36 clearly? reasons why parents should involve Content in children education.

  (What is the thesis Respondent 37

  The use of cell phone on away to go 37 (Cell Phone Caused statement) somewhere, especially while driving Many Accidents) is very dangerous. Teenagers Should be

  Teenagers should be taught sex Taught Sex Education at education at school because teenager school is the appropriate age to know sex clearly, school is the right place for

  38 sex teenagers education, it prevents teenagers to know the mistaken information about sex and helps them to understand themselves and use the knowledge in responsible manner.

  

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  Comments Yes No

  Content

  39 Respondents 39 (Start Your Life with Frozen Food)

  Is the thesis statement state clearly? (What is the thesis statement)

  There are four reasons why we should start consuming frozen food.

  Total

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  The topic is interesting and 1 taking a nap meaningful because it can provide interesting issue.

  Against death Penalty in I am not really interested in the

  Indonesia topic because the writer cannot really persuade the reader with this

  2 topic. The writer should use influencing statement un the essay.

  The word “in my opinion “is not strong enough to persuade people Live, Life Health with

  The topic is interesting but it is not

  3 Organic Coffee clear enough when the writer explains the topic.

  Tying the Knots and Its Is the topic Meaningful and It is interesting topic because only Content

  4 Advantages for a Man some writers write more or less the interesting? same topic as this topic.

  Don’t Burn Your Money Smoking band is still become a

  5 popular issue but she can’t give something new in her writing.

  Stay Away from Dairy The topic is interesting because

  Milk I’ve never heard that milk can

  6 cause cancer and endanger natural balance.

  Be Sporty-Stay Healthy The topic is interesting because it

  7 brings broad discussions.

  Don’t Burn Your Money It is not really interesting because

  8

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Don’t Burn Your Money the writer cannot explain some

  8 supporting idea clearly.

  Let’s Grow More Plant There are much information that

  9 not been discussed yet.

  Finding the Benefits from The topic is interesting because

  Taking a Nap many people don’t like taking a

  10 nap so it is very useful when the writer persuade the writer to take a nap by providing some arguments.

  People should Aware of No- Comment

  11 Their children Obesity Why We Should Prevent Is the topic Meaningful and The topic is meaningful and

  Content Teen Pregnancy interesting? interesting because it is based on

  12 the fact in our real life which happens to the teenagers.

  Breathe Healthy, Live No Comment

  13 Happily A Handkerchief can Help

  The topic is interesting because the Saving the World writer provides some meaningful

  14 supporting ideas which leads to the topic.

  15 Let Us Dance No Comment

  Smoking in Public Area The topic is interesting because it

  16 should be Banned about popular issue.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Let Us Do Abstinence

  The topic is interesting because

  17 many teenagers need to know it nowadays.

  They are not your Little I t is the interesting topic because it

  18 Baby Dolls is a new popular trend recently.

  Prefer Love than Violence It is very meaningful because this as the Better Solution topic has spread to every single

  19 circle of life especially for woman who is not allowed to do abortion.

  Let’s Watch More No comment

  20 Western Movie Let’s Become

  It is an interesting topic because it

  21 Independent By Being Self can motivates the youth to be Employment Is the topic meaningful or entrepreneurs. Content interesting?

  Talk Together, Prevent It is interesting topic because it 22 the Bullying often happens nowadays in a school system.

  Students Should have The topic is meaningful because their Deluxe Breakfast some people have not understood

  23 before School Everyday yet about the benefits of having breakfast.

  Being the Best Parents by

  24 Applying Authoritative It is interesting because it enriches

  Parenting my knowledge. The Ring Changes Your

  Yes since I rarely hear about this Life topic so I think it’s interesting to

  25 expose.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Cloud Computing to

  Yes because it gives me some new

  26 Improve Effectiveness in information.

  Work Giving a Piece of Life

  The topic is interesting because commonly organ donation usually

  27 related to something illegal but his article tells us to do organ donations.

  Love Keeps You Healthy The topic gives us additional knowledge. We often talk about

  28 love and fall in love but we don’t really know the advantages provided by love.

  Teenagers Listening Hip Is the topic meaningful or It is not really interesting because I

  29 Content Hop can’t find clear argument in it. interesting?

  Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Yes. It is brand idea since she

  30 doesn’t take from others idea. Her topic is fresh and interesting.

  We Need a Printed It gives me some beneficial

  31 Communication Media information especially as a PBI student.

  Why People Should not The topic is debatable topic. It is

  32 Take Care Cosmetic now trend taken by people and they

  Surgery are interested in it. Using the Second Stuff to

  Yes because second stuff is

  33 Safe the world booming nowadays.

  Yes because Pamanukan is a city

  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan

  

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  Comments Yes No

  Content

  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Is the topic meaningful or interesting? that hasn’t been known by most of people. I get some new information about Pamanukan.

  35 Herbal Shower and Wash Products for Reducing the Bad Effects of Global Warming It enriches my knowledge.

  36 Parents inn Children’s Education

  Yes because I get some information the roles of parents in children’s education.

  37 Cell Phone Caused Many Accidents The topic is quite common.

  38 Teenagers Should be Taught Sex Education at school

  The topic is interesting because it gives us some solution to teach the teenagers about sex.

  39 Start Your Life with Frozen Food

  It is interesting topic because it is rarely discussed. Total

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  The discussion is clear because the taking a nap writer gives some arguments related to her topic. However, she

  1 has to maintain the relation between one sentence to the next sentence.

  Against death Penalty in The discussion is not clearly

  2 Indonesia because there are some explanations which state unclearly.

  Live, Life Health with No Comment.

  3 Organic Coffee Tying the Knots and Its The discussion is not really clear. Advantages for a Man

  Some arguments are confusing and There is a clear

  4 need some more explanations and

  Content discussion/analysis/argument examples in a real life or of topic implementations in a real life.

  Don’t Burn Your Money I think most of your arguments are not strong enough to persuade

  5 people. Gives some more evidences and reasons. Think about the language you use.

  Stay Away from Dairy The discussion is clear because the

  6 Milk writer provides some data which can support the writing.

  The writer does not provide strong data which can convince the reader

  7 Be Sporty-Stay Healthy about this writing.

  

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  The Title of Writing Responds Criteria Respondents Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Don’t Burn Your Money

  The writer should provide more

  8 explanation which can convince the readers.

  9 Let’s Grow More Plant No explanations

  Finding the Benefits from When the writer gives her

  Taking a Nap arguments, she also provides some

  10 examples from other sources so it can support the argumentation.

  People should Aware of There are some parts where the

  11 Their children Obesity arguments and analysis are not explained clearly.

  Why We Should Prevent There is a clear The writer gives clear explanation

  12 Content discussion/analysis/argument

  Teen Pregnancy in each argumentation of topic

  Breathe Healthy, Live No comment.

  13 Happily A Handkerchief can Help

  The argumentation is lack of data Saving the World or studies from other researchers to

  14 support it. It will be convincing if the writer add at least two more arguments.

  Respondent 15 The writer actually should provide

  (Let Us Dance) four arguments in the writing but

  15 she just gives three arguments.

  Besides that there are some sentences which are unclear.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Respondent 16

  No explanations 16 (Smoking in Public Area should be Banned) Let Us Do Abstinence

  There are some argumentations to strengthen the thesis statement.

  17 Each argumentation is explained clearly by providing some data and examples. They are not your Little

  She explained all argumentation

  18 Baby Dolls clearly. She gives some examples and evidences in her explanations.

  Prefer Love than Violence She explains the bad effects of 19 as the Better Solution There is a clear doing abortion and explains each of

  Content discussion/analysis/argument them on each paragraph.

  Let’s Watch More of topic The writer provides the writing

  20 Western Movie with relevant supporting ideas and examples.

  Let’s Become Independent No explanations.

  21 By Being Self Employment Talk Together, Prevent the

  The writer supported her Bullying argumentation with some data from

  22 other researcher and they are arranged well.

  Students Should have their She gives some evidence which

  23 Deluxe Breakfast before support the thesis statement of the

  School Everyday writing.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Being the Best Parents by

  No Explanations

  24 Applying Authoritative Parenting The Ring Changes Your

  The discussion is unclear. It’s Life better if she explores more

  25 introductions then elaborates the main idea well. Provide some facts appropriately.

  Cloud Computing to The argumentations are well-

  26 Improve Effectiveness in organized and clearly explained.

  Work Giving a Piece of Life

  The writer should add more There is a reasons or evidences to support her

  27 discussion/analysis/argument argumentation especially in Content paragraph 4 of topic

  Love Keeps You Healthy All arguments explained clearly

  28 and supported by logical reasons.

  Teenagers Listening Hip There is no data and examples

  Hop which can support the

  29 argumentation. It just the writer’s opinions.

  Lets’ Visit Pamanukan The writer provides some

  30 information that can persuade the readers.

  We Need a Printed The writer should expand her

  Communication Media explanations by giving further

  31 evidence and examples related to

  

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  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan The writer provides some data about Pamanukan that can convince the readers to go there.

  The discussions are well-organized that the readers can understand the content clearly.

  38 Teenagers Should be Taught Sex Education at school

  The discussion and the argumentations are clear. However, it’s better if the writer add some evidences to ensure the readers.

  37 Cell Phone Caused Many Accidents

  The writer provides and explains some reasons related to her topic clearly.

  36 Parents in Children’s Education

  The writer provides some facts and evidence clearly

  35 Herbal Shower and Wash Products for Reducing the Bad Effects of Global Warming

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  33 Using the Second Stuff to Safe the world

  The discussions are clear but sometimes the bad organization of the idea confused the readers

  32 Why People Should not Take Care Cosmetic Surgery

  She also should add more arguments to strengthen her persuasion.

  There is a clear discussion/analysis/argument of topic the topic to convince the readers.

  31 We Need a Printed Communication Media

  Content

  Comments Yes No

  No explanations

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  Comments Yes No

  Content

  39 Start Your Life with Frozen Food

  All arguments explained clearly and supported by logical reasons. Total

  27

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  The writer can provide evidences

  1 taking a nap and acceptable reasons.

  Against death Penalty in The thesis statement supported by

  2 Indonesia some data and evidences

  Live, Life Health with Supporting idea, examples, and

  3 Organic Coffee evidences support the thesis statement.

  Tying the Knots and Its The thesis statement supported by

  Advantages for a Man some data and evidences. Besides

  4 that, the sentences are influencing and interesting.

  Don’t Burn Your Money The information is relevant to The writer can provide evidences Content

  5 the thesis statement and acceptable reasons.

  Stay Away from Dairy The writer collects data from

  Milk different sources which can support

  6 the thesis statement. It also more convincing to the reader.

  Be Sporty-Stay Healthy) There are much information that not been discussed yet. Therefore it

  7 makes the information does not connect well and the information less relevant.

  8 Don’t Burn Your Money No explanation.

  9 Let’s Grow More Plant No explanation

  

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  No explanation

  19 Prefer Love than Violence as the Better Solution All the arguments provided by the writer refer to the thesis statement.

  The information is relevant to the thesis statement. There is also a correlation between each other.

  18 They are not your Little Baby Dolls

  17 Let Us Do Abstinence The information strengthens the thesis statement. However, the essay needs to be added by some more information.

  16 Smoking in Public Area should be Banned No explanation

  15 Let Us Dance The writer can provide evidences and acceptable reasons.

  No explanation

  14 A Handkerchief can Help Saving the World

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  No explanation

  12 Why We Should Prevent Teen Pregnancy

  No explanation

  11 People should Aware of Their children Obesity

  The information is relevant to the thesis statement The writer can provide evidences and acceptable reasons.

  10 Finding the Benefits from Taking a Nap

  Content

  Comments Yes No

  13 Breathe Healthy, Live Happily

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  24 Being the Best Parents by Applying Authoritative Parenting

  The writer generalizes the idea in the writing. She also does not

  29 Teenagers Listening Hip Hop

  28 Love Keeps You Healthy The information tells the readers that love improve our physical health. They support topic sentence in each paragraph.

  27 Giving a Piece of Life No explanation.

  26 Cloud Computing to Improve Effectiveness in Work No explanation.

  The writer explains about marriage, not other things.

  25 The Ring Changes Your Life

  Some of the argumentations are not relevant to the topic.

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  23 Students Should have their Deluxe Breakfast before School Everyday

  No explanation

  22 Talk Together, Prevent the Bullying

  The information of each paragraph is relevant to the thesis statement by providing some data which support thesis statement

  21 Lets’ Become Independent BY Being Self- Employment

  The information is relevant to the thesis statement No explanation

  20 Let’s Watch More Western Movie

  Content

  Comments Yes No

  In paragraph two, the topic sentence is about breakfast empowers students’ health but it ends up talking about obesity.

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  33 Using the Second Stuff to Safe the world

  Most all the information is relevant to the topic. The writer explains them clearly.

  37 Cell Phone Caused Many Accidents

  All the information is support the topic sentence.

  36 Parents in Children Education

  35 Herbal Shower and Wash Products for Reducing the Bad Effects of Global Warming No explanation.

  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan The explanations and reasons strengthen the argumentations and them relevant to the topic sentence.

  All the information provided by the writer supports the topic sentence. It also well-organized.

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  32 Why People Should not Take Care Cosmetic Surgery

  31 We Need a Printed Communication Media No explanation.

  30 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan The information of each paragraph is relevant to the topic sentences by providing some data which support them

  The information is relevant to the thesis statement and support the topic sentence provide strong argument to support the topic sentence.

  29 Teenagers Listening Hip Hop

  Content

  Comments Yes No

  All the information is relevant to the topic sentence but it less well- organized.

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  Comments Yes No

  Content

  38 Teenagers Should be Taught Sex Education at school

  The topic sentence supported by some data and evidence which are relevant.

  39 Start Your Life with Frozen Food

  The topic sentence supported by some data and evidence which are relevant. Total

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  Yes the conclusion wraps up the taking a nap. writer’s idea, it should be better if the writer makes recommendation without this kind of sentence “I

  1 hope you agree with me and start to take a nap with no doubt.” This sentence does not persuade the readers well.

  Against death Penalty in Yes the conclusion wraps up it

  Indonesia should be better if the writer does not use the word “ in my opinion”

  2 because it is not strong enough to persuade people. “In my opinion,

  The conclusion wraps up the state and citizen must respect Organization the writer’s idea and leave and uphold the basic human right.” the reader feeling satisfied

  Live, Life Health with The conclusion restates thesis

  Organic Coffee statement. It also persuades well “So, for now change your life with

  3 consume organic food”. The conclusion also contains suggestion for the readers, “I suggest you to be selective in choosing your food.”

  Tying the Knots and Its The conclusion restates thesis

  Advantages for a Man statement. However, it should be better if the writer put some

  4

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Tying the Knots and Its recommendations since it is a

  Advantages for a Man persuasive writing that the

  4 conclusion will be more interesting.

  Don’t burn your money The conclusion restates thesis statement. The writer also convince

  5 the reader not to Smoke.

  Stay Away from Dairy The conclusion is too simple and

  Milk not really clear or convincing. The author should make more

  6 convincing conclusion with clear

  The conclusion wraps up summary which support thesis Organization the writer’s idea and leave statement. the reader feeling satisfied

  Be Sporty-Stay Healthy The writer does not provide enough data that can support her thesis

  7 statement that in the conclusion, it is not convincing enough.

  8 Don’t Burn Your Money No explanation

  9 Let’s Grow More Plant No explanation

  Finding the Benefits from It should be better if the writer

  Taking a Nap makes recommendation without this kind of sentence “I hope you

  10 agree with me and start to take a nap with no doubt.” It does not persuade the readers well.

  

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  Yes No People should Aware of

  The conclusion ties in with Their children Obesity introduction. The sentence to end

  11 up the essay also interesting, “Don’t let your family become one of obesity victim.”

  Why We Should Prevent The conclusion ties in with

  Teen Pregnancy introduction. The writer also gives

  12 some persuasive sentence in her conclusion.

  Breathe Healthy, Live The recommendation is interesting,

  Happily “Keep in mind that smoking has

  13 harmful effects that can end up claiming life.”

  The conclusion wraps up A Handkerchief can Help

  The conclusion restates the thesis Organization the writer’s idea and leave

  Saving the World statement. The recommendation is 14 the reader feeling satisfied. also good, “What are you waiting for? Change now and move now.”

  15 Let Us Dance No explanation

  Smoking in Public Area The conclusion ties in with should be Banned introduction. However the writer

  16 needs to put persuasive sentence and make it clear.

  Let Us Do Abstinence The conclusion ties in with introduction. However the writer needs to put persuasive sentence

  17 and make it clear.

  

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  Yes No They are not your Little

  The conclusion concludes the essay Baby Dolls well. However, it will be better if

  18 the reader put some recommendation to convince the readers.

  Breathe Healthy, Live The recommendation is interesting,

  Happily “Keep in mind that smoking has

  19 harmful effects that can end up claiming life.”

  Let’s Watch More No explanation.

  20 Western Movie Let’s Become Independent The conclusion wraps up the By Being Self writer’s idea. The writer also gives

  21 Employment some persuasive sentence in her conclusion.

  Talk Together, Prevent the No explanation.

  22 Bullying Students Should have their The conclusion concludes the essay Deluxe Breakfast before well. However, it will be better if

  23 School Everyday the reader put some recommendation to convince the readers.

  Being the Best Parents by The conclusion concludes the essay

  Applying Authoritative well. However, it will be better if

  Parenting the writer put some

  24 recommendation.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No The Ring Changes Your

  An interesting suggestion to Life persuade the readers “Married is a

  25 great idea! That small ring gives you big chances in your life.

  Cloud Computing to The conclusion concludes the essay

  Improve Effectiveness in well. However, it will be better if

  26 Work the reader put some recommendation to convince the readers.

  Giving a Piece of Life The writer should conclude the argumentation in the conclusion;

  27 she also should put some persuasive sentence to convince the

  The conclusion wraps up reader. Organization the writer’s idea and leave

  Love Keeps You Healthy The conclusion clearly sums up all 28 the reader feeling satisfied. the points of each argument.

  Teenagers Listening Hip Don’t use question to convince the

  Hop reader with final conclusion because if you do it, it will be not

  29 sure. I can not be persuaded since I can’t find clear and reliable arguments in the body.

  Respondent 30 I t has good recommendation, 30 (Lets’ Visit Pamanukan) “Let’s visit Pamanukan and you feel comfort and peace.

  We Need a Printed The conclusion concludes the essay

  31 Communication Media well. It has good suggestion.

  

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  The conclusion ties in with introduction. The writer also gives some persuasive sentence in her conclusion.

  39 Teenagers Should be Taught Sex Education at school

  The conclusion sums up the argumentation. It also has good recommendation.

  38 Cell Phone Caused Many Accidents

  The conclusion sums up the argumentation. It also has good recommendation.

  37 Cell Phone Caused Many Accidents

  Good recommendation, “Let’s do exercise to keep our health.”

  36 Parents in Children’s Education

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  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan) I t has good recommendation, “Let’s visit Pamanukan and you feel comfort and peace.

  The recommendation is good to influence the readers

  33 Using the Second Stuff to Safe the world

  The writer needs to sum up her paragraph by giving the link back or closing statement that the readers know the elaboration.

  The conclusion wraps up the writer’s idea and leave the reader feeling satisfied

  32 Why People Should not Take Care Cosmetic Surgery

  Organization

  Comments Yes No

  35 Herbal Shower and Wash Products for Reducing the Bad Effects of Global Warming

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Start Your Life with The conclusion wraps up The conclusion sums up the Frozen Food the writer’s idea and leave argumentation. It also has good

  Organization 39 the reader feeling satisfied recommendation, “Lets your life healthy by starting consuming frozen food wisely.”

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  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  Yes, each paragraph has a clear taking a nap. topic sentence. Paragraph 1 : You must believe that sleeping in the afternoon is not useless. Paragraph 2:Take a nap can refresh

  1 our mind and our body.

  Paragraph 3 : Take a nap can decrease our stress Paragraph 4: Take a nap can decrease the risk of heart attack especially for people who are busy. Each paragraph has a clear

  Against death Penalty in Yes, each paragraph has a clear

  Organization topic sentence

  Indonesia topic sentence.

  Paragraph 1: Death penalty is a very controversial issue in our modern society from. Paragraph 2 :Death penalty violates God’s rule.

  2 Paragraph 3 : It is the cruelest way to kill.

  Paragraph 4 : Government has to ensure the right of citizens. Paragraph 5 : Death penalty is cruel and unusual punishment that must be eliminated from today’s society.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Live, Life Health with

  Paragraph 1 : Nowadays, Organic Coffee environmental issues and the health of oru family have become the concern. Paragraph 2 : There are a lot of people like to drink beverages, one of the famous beverages is coffee. Paragraph 3 :By growing an organic coffee, it will keep our environment

  3 and earth from global warming.

  Paragraph 4 : Along with being healthier for the earth, organic coffee is healthier for you. Each paragraph has a clear

  Paragraph 5 : Unlike organic coffee, Organization topic sentence organically produced coffee has a pure taste.

  Paragraph 6: Organic coffee offers many benefits for human and their environment. Tying the Knots and Its

  Yes, each paragraph has a clear Advantages for a Man topic sentence.

  Paragraph 1 : Nowadays, people are not really excited with the word 4 “marriage”.

  Paragraph 2 :Marriage can bring you an emotional stability. Paragraph 3: Marriage helps you

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Tying the Knots and Its have better financial issue. Advantages for a Man

  Paragraph 4 : Marriage helps you have better sex experience.

  4 Paragraph 5 : Marriage will make you live longer.

  Paragraph 6 : Getting married or not is a personal choice. Don’t burn your money

  Yes, each paragraph has a clear topic sentence. Paragraph 1 : Nowadays there are many people who smoke everywhere. Paragraph 2 :Smoking is burning

  Each paragraph has a clear money. Organization topic sentence

  Paragraph 3 : Many people especially may think that smoking is a masculine behavior.

  5 Paragraph 4: Smoking is a bad activity that can cause a lot of disease. Paragraph 5 : When people smoke, it means that they want to break their health or they don’t care about their own self. Paragraph 6 : People must care about their own self and others by not smoking.

  

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  Yes No Stay Away from Dairy

  Yes, each paragraph has a clear Milk topic sentence.

  Paragraph 1 : Since childhood, we have told that milk is the perfect drink from nature that is very useful for our body. Paragraph 2 :Milk is always thought as the perfect drink because it contains high calcium and protein that can help to reduce the risk of osteoporosis. Paragraph 3 : One of the bad effect

  Each paragraph has a clear of milk is that it can cause cancer. Organization 6 topic sentence

  Paragraph 4: Another reasons why we should reduce our milk consumptions is that lactating mammals that produce milk also excrete toxins through their milk, which contain pesticides, chemical, and hormones. Paragraph 5 : The big amount of milk consumption also endanger our nature. Paragraph 6 : We can simply see that consuming dairy milk gives a few advantages for our body.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Respondent 7

  Yes, each paragraph has a clear (Be Sporty-Stay Healthy) topic sentence.

  Paragraph 1 : “Health was quiet expensive to cure so we must be healthy overtime.

  7 Paragraph 2: The first reason is fat.

  Paragraph 3 : The second is unhealthy. Paragraph 4 : The last is about the unenergetic movement. Respondent 8

  Paragraph 1 : Nowadays there are (Don’t Burn Your many people who smoke

  Money) everywhere.

  Each paragraph has a clear Paragraph 2 : Smoking is burning

  Organization topic sentence money.

  Paragraph 3 : Many people especially may think that smoking is a masculine behavior. Paragraph 4: Smoking is a bad

  8 activity that can cause a lot of disease.

  Paragraph 5 : When people smoke, it means that they want to break their health or they don’t care about their own self. Paragraph 6 : People must care about their own self and others.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Let’s Grow More Plant

  Yes, each paragraph has a clear topic sentence. Paragraph 1 : Plants are very important for our lives. Paragraph 2: The first benefit of growing plants in your environment is that you can have their beauty. Paragraph 3 : Secondly, having plants in your house not only makes your house beautiful but also makes you mind fresh.

  9 Paragraph 4 : The third benefit that you can get from growing plants Each paragraph has a clear that you can have healthier

  Organization topic sentence environment.

  Paragraph 5 : The last and the most important thing from growing plants is that you can help this earth from global warming effect. Paragraph 6 : Finally, growing more plants is very good for our pleasant heart, fresh mind, and healthy body. Finding the Benefits from Paragraph 1 : You must believe that Taking a Nap sleeping in the afternoon is not useless.

  10 Paragraph 2:Take a nap can refresh

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the Benefits from our mind and our body. Taking a Nap

  Paragraph 3 : Take a nap can decrease our stress

  10 Paragraph 4: Take a nap can decrease the risk of heart attack especially for people who are busy. People should Aware of

  Paragraph 1 : Nowadays, most of Their children Obesity people have less concern on their healthy life.

  Paragraph 2 :First point is about food choice. Paragraph 3 : Second, the cause of

  11 children obesity is lack of physical

  Each paragraph has a clear exercise. Organization topic sentence

  Paragraph 4 : The cause of children obesity is lack of physical exercise. Paragraph 5 : All things are good when they are done in accordance with the portions. Why We Should Prevent

  Paragraph 1 : Teen pregnancy is one Teen Pregnancy of the risks of hav.ing sex which can give great harm on teenagers’ future.

  12 Paragraph 2 : Teen pregnancy can be a bad effect on infant.

  Paragraph 3 : Teen pregnancy will affect on family condition.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Why We Should Prevent

  Paragraph 4 : We should not let

  12 Teen Pregnancy teenagers having sex easily.

  Breathe Healthy, Live Paragraph 1 : Healthy is one of the

  Happily most important ways to live happily.

  Paragraph 2 :Lung cancer is one of the side effects of smoking cigarettes because tobacco contains some radioactive gases. Paragraph 3: The second effect of smoking is respiratory disease. Paragraph 4 : Cigarette smoking can

  13 harm your health even if you are not

  Each paragraph has a clear a smoker. Organization topic sentence

  Paragraph 5 : The other health effects of smoking are it’s effects to the skin, eyes, and mouth. Paragraph 6 : Smoking may make a person look cool but you should consider more than just how it would make you look. A Handkerchief can Help Yes, each paragraph has a clear Saving the World topic sentence. However, I think the article needs at least 2 arguments

  14 more that it will be more convincing.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No A Handkerchief can Help Paragraph 1 : The use of tissue is Saving the World really popular nowadays.

  Paragraph 2: Using handkerchief is beneficial because it takes low

  14 maintenance and fashionable Paragraph 3: You cannot deny the benefits or the fact that handkerchief is environmentally friendlier than tissue.

  Let Us Dance Paragraph 1 : Many people do not like Javanese traditional dances.

  Paragraph 2 : The first advantage of Javanese traditional dances are

  Each paragraph has a clear making you healthy. Organization topic sentence

  15 Paragraph 3 : The second advantage of dancing Javanese traditional dances is training our minds. Paragraph 4 : The last advantage is making us learn the knowledge of Javanese story or legend. Smoking in Public Area

  Paragraph 1 : Have you ever been to should be Banned a public place and you fel uncomfortable because the air is smell and not fresh because of the

  16 burnt tobacco? Paragraph 2: Smoking in public area

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Smoking in Public Area endangers the non smokers. should be Banned

  Paragraph 3 : Cigarette smoke can

  16 cause an inconvenient condition because it causes air pollution.

  Let Us Do Abstinence Yes, each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.

  Paragraph 1 : Nowadays, many teenagers commit to do sex before getting married. Paragraph 2 : Premarital sex can cause Sexual Transmitted Disease. Paragraph 3 : Premarital sex can

  17 cause pregnancy.

  Each paragraph has a clear Paragraph 4 : Premarital sex is also

  Organization topic sentence not good for emotion.

  Paragraph 5 : The last thing is that premarital sex is against morality. Paragraph 6 : Sexual relation among teens are a growing problem in the world. They are not your Little

  Paragraph 1 : Children Beauty Baby Dolls

  Pageant is the beauty competition for two until twelve years old girls. Paragraph 2 Children Beauty

  18 Pageant gives some bad effects for children’s physical condition.

  Paragraph 3 : The children’s make

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No They are not your Little over, the format of the contest, the

  Baby Dolls value given to the children, and the judgment to children’s appearance make the children’s mental bad.

  Paragraph 4 : Children Beauty Pageant is not a matter of an hour competition only. This pageant is

  18 not a cheap thing.

  Paragraph 5 : Some parents think that Children Beauty Pageant is the best place to train the children’s confidence and talent, but when we see further, the Children Beauty

  Each paragraph has a clear Pageant actually hurts the children. Organization topic sentence

  Prefer Love than Paragraph 1 : Unwanted pregnancy

  Violence as the Better becomes a major concern for many

  Solution women to deal with.

  Paragraph 2 : The fetus or the unborn baby has a right to have a life. Paragraph 3 : Women who do the

  19 abortion have a big potential of suffering from physical risks.

  Paragraph 4 : After doing abortion, women tend to feel guilty of losing her own child. Paragraph 5 : Abortion is not the

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Prefer Love than way to deal with unwanted

  19 Violence as the Better pregnancy.

  Solution Let’s Watch More

  Paragraph 1: As we all know, Western Movie

  English has become an international language. Paragraph 2 : The second reason is that watching movies is fun.

  20 Paragraph 3 : The third reason why watching more Western movies is good is that because it is cheap. Paragraph 4 : The last reason is that there are only few Indonesian

  Each paragraph has a clear movies which have good quality. Organization topic sentence

  Let’s Become Yes, each paragraph has a clear

  Independent By Being topic sentence. Self Employment

  Paragraph 1:Becoming a young entrepreneur is one of the ways somebody becomes successful person nowadays. Paragraph 2 :Most home workers

  21 felt that home working afforded them some level of flexibility in how they use their time.

  Paragraph 3 : By following work from home, People can get both of work and life time that make a balance between work and life.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Let’s Become

  Paragraph 4 : Having no commute Independent By Being has another big benefits-financial

  Self Employment saving.

  21 Paragraph 4 : Some advantages of home working recently cited include familiarity , comfort, flexibility, and self-management. Talk Together, Prevent

  Paragraph 1: Bullying is one of the the Bullying most problems that always happen in school.

  Paragraph 2 : The dialogue between school staffs and parents should be started. Each paragraph has a clear

  Paragraph 3 : The second reason is Organization topic sentence school staffs sometimes ignore this

  22 problem.

  Paragraph 4 : The last reason is the system of monitoring in school is not effective enough to prevent the bullying. Paragraph 5: The dialogue has to be made because we need to have a comprehensive monitoring to our children. Students Should have

  Paragraph 1 :What the students have their Deluxe Breakfast as the prelude to a learning process

  23 before School Everyday at school.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Students Should have

  Paragraph 2 : Breakfast is important their Deluxe Breakfast to empower students’ health. before School Everyday

  Paragraph 3 : Children who eat breakfast before school have fewer behavioral issues, absences, according to Kidspot. Paragraph 4 : Having breakfast helps in students overall learning

  23 process.

  Paragraph 5 : The importance ifhaving breakfast everyday are for students’ health, reducing and

  Each paragraph has a clear avoiding behavioral issues and Organization topic sentence absences; improvement in academic performance, flexibility, and self- management.

  Being the Best Parents by Paragraph 1: Every mother/father Applying Authoritative has different characteristics,

  Parenting personalities, and ways in raising her/his children.

  Paragraph 2 : The first one is that

  24 authoritative parenting is the best parenting style.

  Paragraph 3: The second one is that authoritative parents have high standards in parenting children.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Being the Best Parents by Paragraph 4 : The child outcomes of Applying Authoritative authoritative parenting are well

  Parenting behaved, have good discipline, and positively active and creative will be the third one.

  Paragraph 5 : The last one is that based on its dimensions,

  24 authoritative parenting is characterized by high demand and high responsiveness.

  Paragraph 5 : The best way in raising children well is by applying authoritative parenting in our

  Each paragraph has a clear family. Flexibility, and self- Organization topic sentence management.

  The Ring Changes Your Paragraph 1 : Lots of people

  Life nowadays choose not to get married because they think that marriage will only bring bad impact for they live Paragraph 2 : The first reason of

  25 why you should get married is to have a stable life.

  Paragraph 3 : Be with our partner, all the time is the best thing in a marriage. Paragraph 4: By getting married,

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No The Ring Changes Your people can build their dreams

  Life together.

  25 Paragraph 5 : The last benefit of getting married is having a longer life. Cloud Computing to

  Paragraph 1 : With the recent of Improve Effectiveness in internet technology, we came to

  Work know the term cloud computing.

  Paragraph 2 :One main selling point of using drop box is their ease of use Paragraph 3 : By using drop box

  26 distance is not a matter anymore.

  Each paragraph has a clear Paragraph 4 : Using drop box can

  Organization topic sentence save your days resending your defective data.

  Paragraph 5: Cost is one of major disadvantages of data sharing through conventional ways. Giving a piece of life

  Paragraph 1: Giving a part of your body is so helpful to save others’ life. Paragraph 2 : Organ donation is

  27 needed by a lot of patient in this world.

  Paragraph 3 : The lack of organ donor has to be solved.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Giving a piece of life

  Paragraph 4: Doing organ donation is safe. Paragraph 5 : Organ donation means

  27 that you give a life present to other.

  Paragraph 6 : Organ donation is important for someone’s life. Paragraph 1: Many people are afraid

  Love Keeps You Healthy of loving someone because they only see the love from negative side.

  Paragraph 2: Love can give you lower blood pleasure.

  28 Paragraph 3 : Love can be the best Each paragraph has a clear healer in the world.

  Organization topic sentence

  Paragraph 4 : Love can make you look better. Paragraph 5 : Love can affect your health positively. Teenagers Listening Hip

  Paragraph 1 : One of music genres Hop that is very popular in teenagers is Hip-Hop.

  Paragraph 2 : Hip-Hop contains

  29 name of drugs in its lyric.

  Paragraph 3 : Sex is one of theme in Hip- Hop.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Teenagers Listening Hip

  Paragraph 4 : Hip-Hop is famous of Hop its violent lyric.

  Paragraph 5 : After knowing the bad

  29 effects of listening Hip-Hop, you must think twice about Hip-Hop is cool.

  Respondent 30 Paragraph 1 :Pamanukan is a district

  (Lets’ Visit Pamanukan) which located in Subang, West Java.

  Paragrap 2: The first reason why you have to visit Pamanukan is Pamanukan has two beaches which are beautiful to be visited. Each paragraph has a clear

  Paragraph 3 : In Pamanukan, you Organization topic sentence can find

  30 Some delicious food from other cities such as Padang, Manado, Solo, and many more. Paragraph 4 :Pamanukan is one of the strategic cities in West Java. Paragraph 5 :Pamanukan is near with Lembang and Bandung which are in mountainous region. We Need a Printed

  Paragraph 1 : Communication is Communication Media very important for human life, and

  31 eenagers Listening Hip of course for the students of PBI too

  Hop

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No We Need a Printed

  Paragraph 2 :The first benefit of Communication Media having a printed media communication is to communicate among students, lecturers, and other run well.

  Paragraph 3: Second, the media can

  31 be the source of information.

  Paragraph 4: The third benefit is the media gives the students of PBI a chance to explore and show their potential. Paragraph 5 : The bulletin is the best choice. Each paragraph has a clear

  Why People Should not Not all of the paragraph has a clear

  Organization topic sentence

  Take Care Cosmetic topic sentence because the

  Surgery connection between one sentence to another sentence is confusing. For

  32 the example: Cosmetic surgery requires the patients to consult the surgeon before and after the surgery.

  Using the Second Stuff Paragraph 1: Shopping is the most to Safe the world enjoyable activity.

  Paragraph 2 : Second hand stuff

  33 helps us to save money.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Using the Second Stuff to Paragraph 3 : Second hand stuff Safe the world provides us better offering.

  Paragraph 4 :Second hand stuff can save the environment.

  33 Paragraph 5 : Buying second hand stuff will help us to get the best thing without spending a lot of budget

  Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Paragraph 1 :Pamanukan is a district which located in Subang, West Java.

  Paragrap 2: The first reason why you have to visit Pamanukan is Pamanukan has two beaches which Each paragraph has a clear are beautiful to be visited. Organization topic sentence Paragraph 3 : In Pamanukan, you can find

  Some delicious food from other cities such as Padang, Manado,

  34 Solo, and many more.

  Paragraph 4 :Pamanukan is one of the strategic cities in West Java. Paragraph 5 :Pamanukan is near with Lembang and Bandung which are in mountainous region.

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Herbal Shower and Wash Paragraph 1 : Detergent, soap, and Products for Reducing the shampoo are things that people in

  Each paragraph has a clear Bad Effects of Global the world use every day. topic sentence

  Warming Paragraph 2 : The main ingredient of the manufacture of detergent, soap, and shampoo is surfactant compound.

  Paragraph 3 :Hydroflouride (HF) is

  35 somewhat chemical contained in detergent, shampoo, and soap.

  Paragraph 4 : We sometimes do not care about the kinds of chemical in the soap we use everyday. Paragraph 5 : We should find the

  Organization solution to save our earth from global warming.

  Parents in Children Paragraph 5 : The last reason is, it

  Education develops Better understanding of the schooling process.

  36 Paragraph 6 : Parents’ involvement is very important to our children education nowadays

  Cell Phone Caused Many Paragraph 1: Most of people know

  Accidents that there are so many accidents happen in our environment.

  37 Paragraph 2 : While driving we use cell phone for calling or receiving

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Cell Phone Caused Many the call, it becomes the beginning of

  Accidents accidents itself.

  Paragraph 3 : The drivers which use cell phone were less likely to

  37 remember seeing the pedestrians, billboards or other features on a street.

  Paragraph 4 : Cell phone is our important thing nowadays. Teenagers Should be

  Paragraph 1 : Actually, the issue of Taught Sex Education at sexuality is still considered taboo in school Asia including Indonesia. Paragraph 2 : Teenage is the

  Each paragraph has a clear appropriate age to know about sex Organization 38 topic sentence clearly.

  Paragraph 3 : Providing sex education at school is the right choice because school is the right place for teenagers to know about sex besides their family. Start Your New Life with Paragraph 1 : Nowadays people Frozen Food have no much time to prepare their food. Paragraph 2 : The first is frozen

  39 food keeps the food fresh and it still healthy.

  Paragraph 3 : The next reason is

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Start Your New Life with frozen food reduces food wasted. Frozen Food

  Paragraph 4 : The third reason is cost less and profitable. Paragraph 5 : The last reason is

  Each paragraph has a clear Organization

  39 because it is easy to serve and save topic sentence time.

  Paragraph 6 : Frozen food is a new technology which is very beneficial for us especially for busy people

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of She can use proper connectives.

  1 taking a nap.

  Against death Penalty in We have to against death penalty

  2 Indonesia because of it is violates religious beliefs…

  Live, Life Health with She can use proper connectives.

  3 Organic Coffee Tying the Knots and Its

  There are some inappropriate Advantages for a Man connectives used. For example,

  4 “And” is used after full stopped and “But” is used after full

  There are inappropriate stopped. It should not be like that. Organization 5 Don’t Burn Your Money connectives used She can use proper connectives.

  Stay Away from Dairy She can use proper connectives.

  6 Milk

  7 Be Sporty-Stay Healthy She can use proper connectives.

  8 Don’t Burn Your Money She rarely the connective words.

  9 Let’s Grow More Plant) Finding the Benefits from

  10 Taking a Nap Respondent 11 11 (People should Aware of Their children Obesity)

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Why We Should Prevent

  12 _ _

  Teen Pregnancy Breathe Healthy, Live

  13 Happily A Handkerchief can Help

  The writer used proper

  14 Saving the World connectives.

  15 Let Us Dance Everything is good.

  Smoking in Public Area Already Appropriate.

  16 should be Banned

  17 Let Us Do Abstinence) They are not your Little

  18 Baby Dolls There are inappropriate

  Organization Prefer Love than Violence connectives used

  19 as the Better Solution Let’s Watch More

  20 Western Movie Let’s Become Independent But, work and life have to be By Being Self balance too.

  21 Employment But, if you work from home,….

  It should be “However”. Talk Together, Prevent the

  22 Bullying Students Should have their She used appropriate connectives.

  23 Deluxe Breakfast before School Everyday

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Being the Best Parents 24 by Applying

  24 Authoritative Parenting The Ring Changes Your

  25

  25 Life

  Cloud Computing to Improve Effectiveness in

  26

  26 Work Giving a Piece of Life

  27

  27 Love Keeps You Healthy

  28

  28 Teenagers Listening Hip

  29

  29 Hop Lets’ Visit Pamanukan)

  Organization There are inappropriate

  30 30 connectives used

  We Need a Printed

  31

  31 Communication Media Why People Should not

  32 Take Care Cosmetic

  32 Surgery Using the Second Stuff

  33 33 to Safe the world Lets’ Visit Pamanukan)

  34

  34

  

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  4 Tying the Knots and Its Advantages for a Man

  11 People should Aware of Their children Obesity I think, parents should read and understood…

  10 Finding the Benefits from Taking a Nap

  9 Let’s Grow More Plant)

  8 Don’t Burn Your Money

  7 Be Sporty-Stay Healthy

  6 Stay Away from Dairy Milk

  5 Don’t Burn Your Money “…milk is also improve the risk of prostate..” It should be …”milk also improves the risk….

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  3 Live, Life Health with Organic Coffee

  …it is violates religious beliefs, spend much money… (spends) … In many country, which is still use death penalty

  2 Against death Penalty in Indonesia

  All tenses are used correctly

  1 Finding the benefits of taking a nap.

  Language Accuracy

  Comments Yes No

  In the paragraph 1, the last sentence In the paragraph 3 , the first sentence In the paragraph 4, the first and the last sentence.

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No People should Aware of Their It should be I think, parents should

  11 children Obesity read and understand…

  Why We Should Prevent Teen As in real story which I can find Pregnancy) around me, there is a family which is in bad condition. (incorrect) … which I was found around me… (correct).

  A girl will do an abortion (incorrect)

  12 A girl will doing an abortion(correct) They become a beggar because they

  Language All tenses are used have to get …incorrect)

  ….because the don’t Accuracy correctly have…(correct)

  13 Breathe Healthy, Live Happily A Handkerchief can Help

  Reduce the use of tissue and move

  14 Saving the World to the handkerchief is the solution… Reducing…. moving….

  Let Us Dance The first advantage Javanese traditional dances are making you healthy

  15 The first advantage Javanese traditional dances is making you healthy

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Smoking in Public Area

  They will treated… (treat)

  16 should be Banned Let Us Do Abstinence

  17 They are not your Little Baby The clothes still includes….

  18 Dolls The clothes still include… A little boy who grow up and Prefer Love than Violence as become …. the Better Solution

  A little boy who grows up and becomes The bacteria can enter the body after

  19 the insertion of the abortion device,

  Language All tenses are used which is make abortion as one….

  Accuracy correctly

  The bacteria can enter the body after the insertion of the abortion device, which makes abortion as one…. Let’s Watch More Western The first advantage Javanese Movie traditional dances are making you healthy The first advantage Javanese

  20 traditional dances is making you healthy

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Lets’ Become Independent BY

  21 Being Self-Employment Lets’ Become Independent BY

  22 Being Self-Employment Students Should have their

  23 Deluxe Breakfast before School Everyday Being the Best Parents by

  24 Applying Authoritative Parenting

  25 The Ring Changes Your Life Cloud Computing to Improve

  26 Effectiveness in Work Language

  All tenses are used

  27 Giving a piece of life Accuracy correctly

  Love Keeps You Healthy It also makes you looked well.

  28 It also make you look well.

  29 Teenagers Listening Hip Hop Lets’ Visit Pamanukan

  30 We Need a Printed We needs a bulletin. (Incorrect)

  Communication Media We need a bulletin. (Correct)

  31

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondent The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Why People Should not

  32 Take Care Cosmetic Surgery Using the Second Stuff to

  Many factories declare that they’ve

  Safe the world followed green for world and contributing the actions which against… (contributed) To buy second stuff can helps us….

  33 (Buying) (help) Second stuffprovide us better….

  (provides)

  We are becoming sensitive to

  chose…. (choose) Language

  All tenses are used

  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Accuracy correctly

  Herbal Shower and Wash

  35 Products for Reducing the Bad Effects of Global Warming Parents in Children

  They think that their children are

  Education already get the good knowledge….

  36 (have already gotten good …)

  They can feel that their parents are

  support their study Cell Phone Caused Many

  The driver also ignore… (ignores)

  Accidents

  The driver which use the cell phone

  37 while driving… (uses)

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Teenagers Should be

  38 Taught Sex Education at Language

  All tenses are used school Accuracy correctly

  Start New Life with Frozen … theyshould not afraid that ….

  39 Food (should not be afraid)

  Total

  21

  18

  

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  (statements)

  8 Don’t Burn Your Money The smoke does not just for the person who smokes….

  The first reason is the fat fatty body.

  7 Be Sporty-Stay Healthy They are not common illness They are dangerous illness.

  6 Stay Away from Dairy Milk The words are good and clear.

  5 Don’t Burn Your Money The smoke does not just for the person who smokes but also the others. smoke smog In other way they are people who don’t… way word

  4 Tying the Knots and Its Advantages for a Man

  your healthy. (health)

  … whether it is good or not for

  3 Live, Life Health with Organic Coffee

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  2 Against death Penalty in Indonesia

  more better (are better)

  … can make our next activities is

  us? It should be noun (taking a nap)

  …if take a nap is beneficial for

  Vocabulary is right form and context

  1 Finding the benefits of taking a nap.

  Language Use

  Comments Yes No

  One of the most important rule of those ten states is….

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Don’t Burn Your Money smoke smog In other way they are people who

  8 don’t…

  way word

  Let’s Grow More Plant

  One of the most important rule

  9 of those ten states is….

  (statements) Finding the Benefits from

  …if take a nap is beneficial for

  Taking a Nap us?

  10 It should be noun (taking a nap)

  … can make our next activities is

  more better (are better) People should Aware of

  11 Language Vocabulary is right form

  Their children Obesity Accuracy and context

  Why We Should Prevent

  12 Teen Pregnancy Breathe Healthy, Live

  Exposure to secondhand smoke is Happily believed to cause the lung cancer….

  13 Exposure Exposing Secondhand smoke Do you mean it refers to passive smokers

  A Handkerchief can Help

  14 Saving the World

  15 Let Us Dance Smoking in Public Area

  16 should be Banned

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Let Us Do Abstinence

  The adults should pay attention to

  17 their children.

  Adults parents.

  They are not your Little The dictions are well chosen.

  18 Baby Dolls Prefer Love than Violence

  … both the physical and

  19 as the Better Solution psychological health risks.

  (physically and psychologically) Let’s Watch More

  20 Western Movie Let’s Become Independent Young people do not have to wait

  21 By Being Self in old time to become a successful

  Employment person. Language

  Vocabulary is right form Talk Together, Prevent the

  22 Accuracy and context

  Bullying Students Should have their The words are good and clear.

  23 Deluxe Breakfast before Sch Everyday Being the Best Parents by

  If there is an impossible if all Applying Authoritative parents (mother and father) be

  24 Parenting authoritative…. impossible possibility

  The Ring Changes Your Life

  25

  

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  When teenagers listen to it, they become curious. They will search for the name. name term If the teenagers that listen to Hip Hop It is better to use “who”.

  Every gender has the same opportune to explore… opportune opportunity For the example, we buy second

  33 Using the Second Stuff to Safe the world

  32 Why People Should not Take Care Cosmetic Surgery The words are good and clear.

  Potential potencies

  31 We Need a Printed Communication Media …. Show their potential.

  30 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan The words are good and clear.

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  Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Responds

  28 Love Keeps You Healthy When you appear look and beautiful or handsome…. look good

  27 Giving a piece of life Organ donation is very needed by a lot of ill patients. (sounds ridiculous, omitted the word “ill”.)

  Vocabulary is right form and context

  26 Cloud Computing to Improve Effectiveness in Work

  Language Accuracy

  Comments Yes No

  29 Teenagers Listening Hip Hop

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  185

  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Using the Second Stuff to shirt and shoes in $15, but the

  33 Safe the world original offers us $50 …

  Original new

  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Herbal Shower and Wash Products for Reducing the

  35 Bad Effects of Global Warming

  Language Vocabulary is right form

  Accuracy 36 and context The words are good and clear.

  Cell Phone Caused Many …driving on a street need much

  37 Accidents our concentrate. (concentration)

  Teenagers Should be The words are good and clear.

  38 Taught Sex Education at school Start New Life with Frozen The words are good and clear.

  39 Food Total

  18

  21

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  1 taking a nap.

  Against death Penalty in It is prove that government uses….

  2 Indonesia (proved)

  Live, Life Health with

  3 Organic Coffee Tying the Knots and Its

  4 Advantages for a Man

  5 Don’t Burn Your Money Stay Away from Dairy

  6 Milk

  7 Be Sporty-Stay Healthy Language

  8 Don’t Burn Your Money Are passive voice used Accuracy correctly?

  9 Let’s Grow More Plant Finding the Benefits from

  All things are good when they done Taking a Nap in…

  10 All things are good when they are done in….

  People should Aware of

  11 Their children Obesity Why We Should Prevent

  12 Teen Pregnancy Breathe Healthy, Live Happily

  13

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No A Handkerchief can Help

  14 Saving the World Let Us Dance It is prove that government uses….

  15 (proved)

  Smoking in Public Area

  16 should be Banned

  17 Let Us Do Abstinence They are not your Little The girls are judge ….

  18 Baby Dolls (judged)

  Prefer Love than Violence

  19 as the Better Solution Let’s Watch More

  20 Language Are passive voice used

  Western Movie Accuracy correctly?

  Let’s Become Independent

  21 By Being Self Employment Talk Together, Prevent the

  22 Bullying Students Should have their

  23 Deluxe Breakfast before School Everyday Being the Best Parents by

  24 Applying Authoritative Parenting The Ring Changes Your

  25 Life

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Cloud Computing to

  26 Improve Effectiveness in Work

  27 Giving a Piece of Life

  28 Love Keeps You Healthy Teenagers Listening Hip

  29 Hop

  30 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan We Need a Printed

  31 Communication Media Language Why People Should not Are passive voice used

  Accuracy correctly?

  32 Take Care Cosmetic Surgery Using the Second Stuff to

  33 Safe the world

  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Herbal Shower and Wash Products for Reducing the

  35 Bad Effects of Global Warming Parents in Children

  36 Education

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Cell Phone Caused Many

  37 Accidents Teenagers Should be

  Language Are passive voice used

  38 Taught Sex Education at Accuracy correctly? school

  Start New Life with Frozen

  39 Food Total

  35

  4

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  1 taking a nap.

  Against death Penalty in

  2 Indonesia Live, Life Health with

  3 Organic Coffee Tying the Knots and Its

  4 Advantages for a Man

  5 Don’t Burn Your Money Stay Away from Dairy

  There are some commas which are

  6 Milk not used appropriately..

  7 Be Sporty-Stay Healthy

  8 Don’t Burn Your Money Are there commas, semi colons, and other

  9 Let’s Grow More Plant Mechanics punctuations marks used

  Finding the Benefits from

  10 inappropriately? Taking a Nap People should Aware of

  11 Their children Obesity Why We Should Prevent

  12 Teen Pregnancy Breathe Healthy, Live

  There is a sentence which needs Happily comma but the writer did not give comma.

  As a result several lung diseases

  13 caused by smoking…

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No A Handkerchief can Help

  14 Saving the World

  15 Let Us Dance Smoking in Public Area should The can be fatigue asthma, if they do

  16 be Banned not….

  17 Let Us Do Abstinence They are not your Little Baby Actually, in their age children….

  18 Dolls Actually, in their age, children….

  Prefer Love than Violence as

  19 the Better Solution Let’s Watch More Western

  20 Are there commas, Movie semi colons, and other

  Mechanics Let’s Become Independent By punctuations marks

  21 Being Self Employment used inappropriately? Talk Together, Prevent the

  22 Bullying Students Should have their

  23 Deluxe Breakfast before School Everyday Being the Best Parents by

  According to Krevans and Gibb

  24 Applying Authoritative (1996) an Kerr et al (1994), warm,

  Parenting responsive parenting….

  According to Krevans and Gibb (1996) an Kerr et al (1994), warm, responsive parenting….”

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No

  25 The Ring Changes Your Life

  Cloud Computing to Improve

  Some of the does not provide with

  Effectiveness in Work comma.

  Compared to the traditional way

  of data sharing such as CD or flash disk usingdropbox is…. Compared to the traditional way of data sharing such as CD or

  26 flash disk , using dropbox is….

  In high demanding work which

  Are there commas, deadline is a big concern speed is semi colons, and other the essence, …. Mechanics punctuations marks

  In high demanding work which used inappropriately? deadline is a big concern, speed is the essence, ….

  27 Giving a Piece of Life

  28 Love Keeps You Healthy Teenagers Listening Hip Hop So it is not surprising, if the

  29 teenagers…. (without comma before “if”)

  Lets’ Visit Pamanukan)

  30

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No We Need a Printed

  31 Communication Media Why People Should not Take The commas are unnecessary.

  32 Care Cosmetic Surgery Using the Second Stuff to

  33 Safe the world

  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Herbal Shower and Wash

  So it is not surprising, if the Products for Reducing the teenagers…. (without comma

  Are there commas, semi

  35 Bad Effects of Global before “if”) colons, and other

  Mechanics Warming punctuations marks used Parents in Children inappropriately?

  36 Education Cell Phone Caused Many

  37 Accidents Teenagers Should be

  38 Taught Sex Education at school Start New Life with Frozen

  39 Food

  10

  29 Total

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Finding the benefits of

  1 taking a nap.

  Against death Penalty in

  2 Indonesia Live, Life Health with

  Presevere Preserve

  3 Organic Coffee Tying the Knots and Its

  Because you have you own

  4 Advantages for a Man family… you’re

  5 Don’t Burn Your Money Stay Away from Dairy

  6 Milk Are there words Mechanics misspelled?

  Be Sporty-Stay Healthy

  7

  8 Don’t Burn Your Money

  9 Let’s Grow More Plant Finding the Benefits from

  10 Taking a Nap People should Aware of

  11 Their children Obesity Why We Should Prevent Teen Pregnancy

  12

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Breathe Healthy, Live

  13 Happily A Handkerchief can Help

  Friend!y friendly

  14 Saving the World You sweat your sweat Beside besides

  15 Let Us Dance Smoking in Public Area

  16 should be Banned

  17 Let Us Do Abstinence They are not your Little

  Theit their

  18 Baby Dolls Prefer Love than Violence

  19 Are there words as the Better Solution Mechanics misspelled?

  Let’s Watch More

  20 Western Movie Let’s Become Independent

  21 By Being Self Employment Talk Together, Prevent the

  22 Bullying Students Should have their

  23 Deluxe Breakfast before School Everyday Being the Best Parents by

  24 Applying Authoritative Parenting

  

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  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No The Ring Changes Your

  25 Life

  Cloud Computing to Improve Effectiveness in

  26 Work

  27 Giving a Piece of Life

  28 Love Keeps You Healthy Teenagers Listening Hip

  29 Hop

  30 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan) Theit their

  We Need a Printed

  31 Communication Media Are there words

  Mechanics Why People Should not misspelled?

  32 Take Care Cosmetic Surgery Using the Second Stuff to

  Latter later

  33 Safe the world Havens heavens

  34 Lets’ Visit Pamanukan Herbal Shower and Wash Products for Reducing the

  35 Bad Effects of Global Warming Parents in Children

  36 Education

  

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  197

  Responds Criteria Respondents The Title of Writing Point to be Considered Comments

  Yes No Cell Phone Caused Many

  37 Accidents Teenagers Should be

  Are there words Mechanics

  38 Taught Sex Education at misspelled? school Start New Life with Frozen

  39 Food Total

  6

  33

  

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APPENDIX D

Examples of Feedbacks Given By 2 nd Semester Students

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APPENDIX E

Examples of Feedbacks Given by 4 th Semester Students

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